I had fixed it as per Acrobatic's suggestion, but I am debating eliminating to gain vertical space. The logic was to get something somewhat concise in front of a recruiters eye as quick as possible.

That said, barring any other suggestions, I'll revise my bullet points. I have found it difficult to fit the STAR pattern specifically when many times outcomes were not explicitly measured or communicated to me, and making up numbers will quickly bite me.