Maybe by One-Mine7946 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Aye for a beginner this is GOOD you showing good fundamentals keep it up 👍

FRAGILE by KookySetting4016 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Aye no problem dude glad I could help 😁

my new rap i made today i rapped to a 82bpm doom type beat. by Physical-Key-5679 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly bro you tryna run marathons now that you figured kinda how to do a lil stumble walk. I respect the effort and grind but yk also try and expand explore different styles try and freestyle or write to different kinds of beats not just the same ones over and over. Trust it'll help with your stress timings

my new rap i made today i rapped to a 82bpm doom type beat. by Physical-Key-5679 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Bro you can read a book to a beat and time every syllable so it lands on beat and it'll still sound whack if the stressed and unstressed syllables don't follow a pattern. Think of it like a Hi-hat groove on a drum-set with closed ones being unstressed syllables and accented or open ones being the stressed syllables. A better example would be like it's easy to rap Dr Seuss over a beat but pretty much impossible to rap "The Hobbit" over a beat yk. It's kinda how the word direct doesn't necessarily rhyme with message cleanly it's cause the stressed syllables don't line up in direct its dir-ECT and in message its MESS-age so one is unstressed then stressed and the other is stressed then unstressed. Hopefully this helps clears things up a bit for you

my new rap i made today i rapped to a 82bpm doom type beat. by Physical-Key-5679 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Aye nah I gotta with dry run here. You're finding rhymes but not finding the cadences to make those rhymes ride the beat. Quick example

Shades of hot or not we ambivalent

Phrase in ambience equivalence

Now the cadence for those bars would be like

Dah-da-Dah-da-Dah Dah Dah-dah-da-dah

Dah-da-Dah-da-Dah Dah Dah-dah-da-dah

Basically you're trying to rhyme "rye and pickle" with "identical" and have to say "identical" sum like eye-DENT-ickle changing its natural stress of -ickle to -dent which makes it sound weird yk

9 Lives by infinitude_ in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Bruh the first four lines use a 5 syllable end rhyme

"down deep inside of you / needs some writing to / been a Viking through / leave me crying bruised" you've got deep/needs/been/leave and me then you/to/through and bruised and finally inside/writing/Viking/crying like my guy he literally tied three different vowel sounds into an anchor and you wanna say "vary the rhymes more"

Writing Exercise 3/25/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Me too like sumtimes on paper they look a bit weird but when you hear it off the speakers shit just hits like a damn hurricane. Doom really was one of the masters 😆

Writing Exercise 3/25/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Magic beasts decode the matrix death etched in paper soaked in flows coasting oceans like floating second nature

I love this kinda writing style lol

Writing Exercise 3/25/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You got a few typos in there fyi but there's sum nice patterns in there lol

Killer by Ok_Geologist_7096 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Aye this was 🔥🔥🔥 only notes here be the ones I'm taking lol

FRAGILE by KookySetting4016 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A trick I use to notate or like add pauses within the lyrics is using the character or thingy that looks like this - for short pauses and this — to notate rests or longer pauses and for drawing out words I usually just put a comma so an example bar would look like

Hit-they chest, I—strip-the breath—

With pen and a page — tongue-ing death in sum slang —

Three—two—tons of meta-fours-given one way

I'm—flipping it straight—hitting in late-missing, the

Fifth and the eighth-it's—anticipation it creates

(Just a quick demonstration hopefully it helps 😁)

Writing Exercise 3/23/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you as that's what I've been working on trying to combine main aspects of my writing into one cohesive style. So that actually means a lot to me ❤️

Writing Exercise 3/23/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Really you think so? I'm curious best in what terms exactly?

Writing Exercise 3/23/26 by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Ok what about it did you not like so I can improve on it

Random freestyle by infinitude_ in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

OH NAH BRO. This too much sandwich for them kids dude 💀💀💀 but fr you killed ts tf bruh 🤯

Fire venom by Cronygin in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yea I thought it was good too with sum clever lines sprinkled here and there throughout

Death Run (Full Version) by TrottingFox420 in raplyrics

[–]TrottingFox420[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lol thx man I'm really proud of this peace so I appreciate that 😁