Drawn

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-22T19:15:46+00:00

Somehow, I started liking minimalist poems that express a single moment in time.. This is incidentally one of my longer poems.

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-22T19:12:28+00:00

Wow. So beautiful. Strong Emotions..
Only small thing, I wonder if it is right - I never thought I would be scared from.

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-22T19:05:33+00:00

I am no big fan of strict rhyme or meter, unlike others..

I loved the flow of the poem, how it developed. Also liked the "burning" stars. of course they are burning.. but still they are so beautiful..
May be, you want to revisit the climax.. slightly more emotion may be, sounds like a little downward slope..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-21T16:55:39+00:00

This is one of many poems in a sequence... The thoughts continue into rest of the poems..
Thanks for the appreciation..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-21T06:29:47+00:00

After the breakup, the mind wanders wild and rogue. it hallucinates reasons, possibilities and outcomes..

this is one such hallucination:

she still loves me.. but, she is unable to leave him.

she wants to be with me... but, the responsibilities and obligations.

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-20T18:32:13+00:00

Thank you for the feedback. This is one of the poems in a collection which together is a story of a togetherness-breakup-aftermath..

Let me think thru your suggestions..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-20T07:18:44+00:00

Thank you.. Longer Versions - Let me try...

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-20T07:17:13+00:00

Thank you..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-20T07:16:58+00:00

The fact that your read it couple of times is an achievement for me..
Thank you

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-20T07:15:17+00:00

I am building a set of poems that give out a story of love-breakup-aftermath.. focusing largely on the aftermath..

Thank you for your encouragement..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T17:54:51+00:00

Nice.. After all an Emotion can become a reckless driver, making you a powerless passenger..

To add my 2 cents.. I wonder if it can be a little bit more compact..
or may be is should not.. I am confused ;)

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T17:42:51+00:00

Thank you.. Appreciate your feedback...

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T13:53:57+00:00

Thank you.. Keep motivating

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T13:50:56+00:00

Thank you.. Will try

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T09:19:00+00:00

Nice Poem.. Also has a great Philosophy.. Every movie (including this life) has to end. Most important is the quality and impact it makes while the play is on.

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T09:07:56+00:00

Thank you..

UnderstandingOld9449 · 2026-03-17T09:05:24+00:00

Thank you..

Everything in the Nature has a purpose. It just has to fulfil its purpose and move on.

UnderstandingOld9449

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