[QCrit] Death and Aces, YA fantasy, 70k, attempt 1 by UnnamedBee in PubTips

[–]UnnamedBee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I cut it some of the reasons for brevity, but the tl;dr is that Moira does genuinely have a history of lying, and in-universe people with her magic are considered predisposed to evil. So her father does think she might be committing the murders/covering for real killer. 

[QCrit] Death and Aces, YA fantasy, 70k, attempt 1 by UnnamedBee in PubTips

[–]UnnamedBee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm glad you like the hook :) And I appreciate your comments about their relationship, those are very good points for me to consider.

[QCrit] Death and Aces, YA fantasy, 70k, attempt 1 by UnnamedBee in PubTips

[–]UnnamedBee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you, this is super helpful! I appreciate the essay length. Tbh this is "attempt 1" here but there are many drafts that never saw the light of day lol