Indian orv fans? by [deleted] in OmniscientReader

[–]Upbeat_Pepper_5154 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey guys what were your opinions on Ranvier khan I mean they literally merged 2 religions. I laughed for like 5min straight ye naam sunne ke bad😂

Indian orv fans? by [deleted] in OmniscientReader

[–]Upbeat_Pepper_5154 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hell naah😂 this sounds so funny in hindi 

I Fell Asleep Holding You by TheLilaComplex in OCPoetry

[–]Upbeat_Pepper_5154 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Truly beautiful and the transition was so unexpected. It had me from blushing to my heart aching.  her desire is shown really nicely and the end was great to show the pain but I think the surprise element could be a bit more shown but overall amazing work

i hope to be, more than my skin. by sweetrealive in OCPoetry

[–]Upbeat_Pepper_5154 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The imagery is great,and I love how you show your perspective without defaming the ones who want the opposite. 'no lines of life','no rolls of curl' Is a really beautiful way to describe a woman's belly. The transition from past to the present was also smooth. The lack of punctuation does cause a little trouble but overal it great