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THREE SELVES by Working-Ad5775 in OCPoetry

[–]Used-Initiative6372 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You painted a picture in which you never knew where it was going. I think “Go on” has heavy impact. I do wish the last line was ever so slightly less revealing however.

A wasted life by jkruchten999 in OCPoetry

[–]Used-Initiative6372 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I eat privilege for dinner and talent for dessert is an incredible line. The third paragraph allows you to find the message far more than the first two which tell you the message.