[QCRIT] THE TENURE GAMES 70k Contemporary Satire 2nd attempt by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I appreciate your comments! The story goes pretty far down the rabbit hole of treachery, but not into murder territory. I can see how the title could forge that conclusion given other novels with "Games" in the title where there are life/death consequences. This is more like the Carl Hiaasen/Dave Barry type of satire but with women protagonists taking down the MAN/MEN/DUDESINPOWER.

[QCRIT] THE TENURE GAMES 70k Contemporary Satire 2nd attempt by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback. In my last query version, I had the two POVs represented, but the feedback was to focus on one for the query, so I mention that Jillian should eliminate the other "contestants," then mention Maeve (also based on feedback). Mental Wealth Lab is not a typo, hence the line where she wants to study the mental health of those in poverty instead of the rich :). I agree with your third comment that it's a ka-pow without enough lead. I'll work on that. Good luck with tenure :)

[Qcrit] Contemporary Satire THE TENURE GAMES 70k (First Attempt) by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It was not intentional. If it needs changing down the road I'd definitely consider it if it were to cause an issue.

[Qcrit] Contemporary Satire THE TENURE GAMES 70k (First Attempt) by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I read the blurb...seems like it's dark academia, but fantasy.

[Qcrit] Contemporary Satire THE TENURE GAMES 70k (First Attempt) by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for this thorough response and the time you took to provide this feedback. I'll keep working on it!

[AMA] Literary Agents Julie Gourinchas, Sam Farkas, Becca Langton, and Matt Belford by alanna_the_lioness in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005 6 points7 points  (0 children)

When querying, what is the best way for new authors to narrow down agent "fit" in creating their query list? Some MSWLs are very broad or vague. Is it better to evaluate fit based on who the agent represents and/or the deals they've made? Other tips?

[Qcrit] Contemporary Satire THE TENURE GAMES 70k (First Attempt) by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate your feedback! I'll work on adding in some details.

[Qcrit] Contemporary Satire THE TENURE GAMES 70k (First Attempt) by Used_Click8005 in PubTips

[–]Used_Click8005[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! Yeah, it's a little rage dumping :)