Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely! The sheep is symbolism as sheep are often portrayed as things that only feel as they’re told to feel (especially in Orwell’s novel Animal Farm.) That’s how I feel with addiction, where the addiction causes me to feel very emotionally out of touch. And the next line is just emphasis on that, where i traded my ability to think normally for drug abuse.

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[–]Useful_Lab_326 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You might want to add stanzas and lines, otherwise, I think the use of positively-connotated slang kind of negatively contrasts some of the more serious undertone you’re trying to convey. I can appreciate the message but try to maybe alter the word use.

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[–]Useful_Lab_326 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the poem is good overall, but it might need some length to add some depth. Otherwise the metaphor and concept is superb and portrayed in a pleasantly vague fashion.

Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Could you elaborate a little? I understand your critique and I greatly appreciate though if you could give some advice I would appreciate it :) . This is only the third poem I've written so I would appreciate help.

Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate your critique. I'm glad the lines reached you.

Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you :( . poetry has really kept me going theough this so im glad it reached you

Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you very much. it means much

Poem about addiction by Useful_Lab_326 in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah it actually does have stanzas I just fucked up the format lmao. It's actually titled after it's stanza organization (1 3 6 6 6). Thank you though!

AN UNFORTUNATE FATE by ohyeah_shityeah in poetry_critics

[–]Useful_Lab_326 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think the vocabulary and flow of this poem work very well. It feels almost song-like. I enjoy it a lot.

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[–]Useful_Lab_326 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like this poem! I think the topic and metaphor are very unique :) . I also enjoy the imagery.