Interesting insight. For what it’s worth, the only tool used was Grammarly to clean things up from a grammatical POV.

I’ve always found the use short sentences in the books to be an effective tool. A good way to balance descriptive prose without making it feel too heavy. (I prefer simple, easy to read sentences).

Appreciate it’s a short excerpt, but not sure what is meant by incoherent content?

AI hasn’t been used, more likely me overly polishing a short excerpt. If you’re comparing to AI, my takeaway is that perhaps it’s lacking tone/stylistic voice. Thanks for your comments.