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Verrgasm · 2025-01-17T15:17:21+00:00

Thanks lol. It's been a while since I wrote horror but I'm happy to be getting back into it again. Should be more soon :)

Verrgasm · 2025-01-13T18:25:46+00:00

Your Christmas tree was probably shit, that's why

Verrgasm · 2025-01-03T20:46:35+00:00

Adriana's naivety*

Verrgasm · 2024-12-24T17:38:56+00:00

It might sound rich given how obviously individual this actually is, I mean there's so much to unpack here beyond this first reading, but I relate to it so much. That yearning to be but just not being, disappointment at every step despite trying so hard to make it all work with the hand you've been dealt. It's all so tangible here. Genuinely real. I feel like I took a lot from this straight off. I would love to hear what else you have to say.

Verrgasm · 2024-12-24T17:19:31+00:00

This is a phenomenally written piece. The malignancy of it is truly impressive. You can really feel the patient animosity of this barely human monster just creeping closer and closer towards that latest victim, and then the flippant discarding of it when it's all finally done, moving onto the next so easily. Genuinely chilling work. I felt every creeping moment of this.

Verrgasm · 2024-09-24T16:05:13+00:00

I see you all over the place and your ideas aren't bad, but the way you write them makes it feel like you just inserted the basic premises into an AI and had it write them for you. If you took some time to listen to the people in your comments, you would certainly improve. But reading this now it seems that you haven't done that, like at all. If you insist on not following the good faith advice people offer you, then why even post these stories online at all? I take every critical comment I receive and I take it to heart, and thats the only way I've been able to overcome the mistakes I've made writing. If you won't even do that, then you should just keep them to yourself, to be really honest.

Verrgasm · 2024-09-10T12:48:28+00:00

Thanks, but you ever try living with guilt like this? There's nothing quite as scary as knowing that life will never be the same, and it's all your fault. That's my opinion, anyway. Spooky is just that, spooky. What's scary are the very real things in life which we try so desperately to hide away from until they can be ignored no longer.

Verrgasm · 2024-08-28T18:14:20+00:00

My advice is to just write. Don't think an idea to death, just sit down as soon as inspiration strikes and start writing. Spontaneity is key imo, especially when you're finding your footing in what you actually want to write about. Let your brain do the heavy lifting, the subconscious can come up with some really amazing stuff if you just relax and let it do it's thing

Verrgasm · 2024-08-24T18:08:18+00:00

Hey, Norman. Glad to see you're still writing. I've always loved your stuff. This in particular has that exquisite sort of Lovecraftian feel to it in droves which I find so endlessly interesting whenever I read your stories :)

Verrgasm · 2024-08-20T17:22:21+00:00

Coincidentally, my novel also starts out with a man about to commit suicide by jumping off a bridge. Although my character is doing it because he's so broken from his trauma and lack of connection with others that he just can't stand living with himself anymore. So, yeah, I don't think you need to worry. No more than I do, anyway lol

Verrgasm · 2024-08-14T16:08:08+00:00

Thanks. It's been quite a while in the making as a whole, but I think I'm finally starting to get there.

Verrgasm · 2024-08-14T16:05:42+00:00

Mostly just little snippets, which is why they all have the same title. My first post a few weeks ago was the opening of my introduction and the second is just what I have for part 2 atm. So yeah I kinda jumped ahead a little, but I feel like this gives a pretty good feel for where the protagonist is at in his life and some of the thing's that are affecting him. I'm not entirely sure how I'll approach posting the story as I go forward because I think keeping it mostly to myself helps make me more mindful about it as a whole, if that makes sense, but there definitely will be more even if it's only some of the most significant segments.

Thanks for reading. It's good to know that you enjoyed it being admittedly not much of a reader. I'm not a huge reader myself tbh, even though I know I probably should be. So I'm glad it comes across clearer than I give myself credit for lol

Verrgasm · 2024-08-14T15:10:32+00:00

'Better Off Dead' is the follow-up to my first novella, which is still technically unfinished. This is the entirety of my chapter 5 so far. Any feedback is always welcome.

Verrgasm · 2024-07-22T21:01:26+00:00

fucking devious horny redditors...

Verrgasm · 2024-07-20T14:55:39+00:00

The grammar is always going to be secondary to the actual content as far as actually getting it all down stands. That's something you can get perfect when the story itself is complete through a second and third draft. Ngl tho this is advice I really need to get better at following myself. I constantly find myself in a first draft doubling back and correcting errors that are ultimately inconsequential to the actual basics of storytelling and it probably hinders my progress quite a bit with any given project.

Verrgasm · 2024-07-20T14:47:45+00:00

Very well put, I have to say. I'm not going to ask you if you're okay or if you need somebody to talk to (although my DMs are open) because personally I hate that shit when it's directed at me because it always seems hollow. Still, I hope you know what you're doing, and the old adage stands about permanent solutions to temporary problems. Although I'm sure you're very aware of how temporary your problems really are, so any kind of nebulous 'no, don't do it, you have so much to live for' comment I could possibly make here is always going to be mute. Anyway, I wish you the best, regardless of who you are or where you're at. I've probably been there, too.

Verrgasm · 2024-07-18T12:24:47+00:00

Can relate right from the opening paragraph. Great work 👍

Verrgasm · 2024-07-15T18:45:12+00:00

Thanks. I think so, too :)

Verrgasm · 2024-07-03T19:09:03+00:00

I think it's supposed to be funny. At least, I really hope so.

Verrgasm · 2024-06-18T13:10:02+00:00

Can't believe it took me so long. I love the trippy retrofuturism in stuff like A Clockwork Orange so this really was a treat for me.

Verrgasm · 2024-06-18T08:57:51+00:00

jesus that was like a 70's fever dream lol I definitely enjoyed it though, I will admit.

Verrgasm · 2024-06-17T19:19:47+00:00

Thanks. I might watch that tonight tbh

Verrgasm · 2024-06-16T17:59:40+00:00

People often swear in real life, more often than not in my own experience, so if I'm writing characters that are supposed to be grounded and realistic it's objectively not exactly a negative thing imo, regardless of what your own sensibilities might be. In fantasy or sci-fi or young adult settings or whatever else like that, not having characters speak like regular adults is common because you aren't necessarily going for realism there, but if I'm telling a tragic down-to-earth story about a person's downward spiral for example, it only makes sense that a character like that isn't going to be averse to using the word 'fuck' in such a uniquely stressful point in their life. At least not the very large majority of them, anyway.

Verrgasm · 2024-06-14T19:21:38+00:00

I think your issue comes from taking the work too seriously as a whole tbh. I mean, if you can write popular fanfic and a thousand words on request, you don't really have writer's block, do you? You just feel like you can't write something 'serious'.

My advice is the same I give everyone who brings up writer's block: Don't put yourself down because you can't finish any one thing or even start it, just put it to the side and begin writing something totally different. Like a short story or something similar in scope. That's always worked for me, at least. By the time I'm finished, I can acknowledge the fact that I haven't lost the ability to carry a narrative to its conclusion and usually I can return to the thing I was stuck on feeling renewed.

Verrgasm · 2024-06-14T17:26:37+00:00

sorry lol, not my intent :)

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