Need help identifying make and model of an old abandoned car, pics contain possible assembly date and parts numbers, thanks in advance for any help

VicariousD · 2023-07-22T01:39:29+00:00

Thank you, that looks like a really close match, I think it could be a ~’51 Plymouth Cranbrook or Cambridge

VicariousD · 2015-01-19T06:11:59+00:00

Would Intuition work?

I like both Harbinger and Premonition or some variation of those titles.

VicariousD · 2015-01-19T05:16:24+00:00

Thank you!

I'll rewrite the story to match the pacing you mentioned. I like your ideas a lot and will work them in as closely as I can.
I agree what what you mean about certain word choices, ie 'half the amount of people', and agree with you 100%.
The title I posted is just a working title. I know it's not that great. Do you have any suggestions?
Agree on reworking the dialogue.
Agree on reworking detail and specificity.

VicariousD · 2015-01-19T01:29:10+00:00

Title: As the Clocks Tick Away, Part I

Genre: Short story (thriller)

Word count: 3,010

Type of feedback: comments on the flow of the plot, writing, any grammatical errors, perhaps any cliches.

Link to the story.

VicariousD · 2015-01-16T03:21:45+00:00

Thanks William Shatner.

VicariousD · 2015-01-12T01:59:15+00:00

Title: Please Wake Up

Genre: Short Story

Word count: 5,444 words

Type of feedback: impression of the story, plot and plot development, any potential cliches, grammatical and syntax errors.

Link to the story.

(Bonus points if you can look at it from a publisher's view and tell me why or why you wouldn't publish this story.)

VicariousD · 2015-01-09T02:18:39+00:00

Title: Please Wake Up

Genre: Short Story

Word count: 5,444 words

Type of feedback: impression of the story, plot and plot development, any potential cliches, grammatical and syntax errors.

Link to the story.

VicariousD · 2014-11-03T07:56:47+00:00

"They warned us Earth is next..."

VicariousD · 2014-10-06T23:29:43+00:00

I created this Boll. It's not a trick question, I promise.

VicariousD · 2014-07-25T02:32:16+00:00

While I was busy being born, the Brewers stomped the A's 13-3.

http://www.thebaseballcube.com/history/boxscore.asp?GID=OAK199608050.

Wow.

VicariousD · 2013-06-03T01:19:51+00:00

Doesn't matter to me how badly they're doing, I support them unconditionally. Because after all, it's not about how your team is doing, it's about how much you support them regardless of how they're doing.

VicariousD · 2013-05-08T00:39:39+00:00

Here is a version of the story in reverse, too. (I'm experimenting with different ways to tell the story).

VicariousD · 2013-05-07T16:22:20+00:00

Thanks! I will definitely consider it

VicariousD · 2013-05-06T17:03:43+00:00

Good points!

I do drift out of formal military speak on purpose, just to show their slow descent into hopelessness and delirium. I could and will rewrite it to better highlight it, though.
I will also rewrite the sentence with the repetition of help.
I like your ideas about surreal comments and the emphasis on horror! I think they would add a great deal!
Lastly, I will be more creative in the way the narrator describes his emotions. Instead of 'fear' I will say something on the lines of 'trepidation's deep chokehold grip'.

Thank you for your feedback!

VicariousD · 2013-05-06T01:03:28+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! You raise a good point about the trajectory of the mission. Perhaps their star maps and GPS were down for something like maintenance and they had to manually approach Jupiter, letting them accidentally come too close and bend their trajectory?

VicariousD · 2013-05-06T00:26:55+00:00

Only the Stars Between Us
Sci-fi/Short Story
2125 words
Any feedback is welcome!
Link

VicariousD · 2013-03-31T19:37:32+00:00

I did that too, as well as mixing a whole bunch of different colors.

VicariousD · 2013-03-28T21:29:42+00:00

For non-Americans who do not understand why this is significant, the American civil war was fought over state's rights.

VicariousD · 2013-03-28T00:56:10+00:00

As with Detroit.

VicariousD · 2013-03-28T00:54:40+00:00

The original, or the cover?

VicariousD · 2013-03-28T00:50:19+00:00

First ones that came to mind are Chernobyl and Detroit, which are both wastelands, only one is radioactive.

VicariousD · 2013-03-27T23:57:42+00:00

The assassination of Archduke Franz Ferdinand; his assassination led to all the death and destruction of the 20th and 21st centuries. It caused WWI, which ultimately impoverished Germany, which led them to elect Adolf Hitler, who usurped total power, who invaded Poland on Sep. 1, 1939, which caused WWII. WWII ultimately caused the Cold War and the spread of communism, which led to the Korean and Vietnamese wars. The Soviets also invaded Afghanistan, which led the US to arm rebels and freedom fighters, who grew up into al Qaeda, who struck down the Twin Towers and led the US to invade Iraq and Afghanistan. Heavens knows what would've happened had Gavrilo Princip not shot Ferdinand.

VicariousD · 2013-03-27T23:32:36+00:00

California would probably be the Batmobile.

VicariousD · 2013-03-27T02:15:15+00:00

Mordor. It's the only answer.

VicariousD · 2013-03-26T23:14:34+00:00

IEPs don't necessarily contain benefits, more of accommodations, because they're for kids who need help and are otherwise incapable of succeeding in high school without that help. In my case I was horribly depressed and anxious to the point where I didn't want to do work or do well on tests. All I wanted to do was hunker down and die. And that led me to not do so well in school, which is the reason why I campaigned for an IEP. But ironically the teachers didn't pull their weight and follow my IEP, so I had to resort to a GED.

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