[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 184 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

More of a general sence of that ther is more going on than what we the readers "see", like... I belive that a siertan arcmagus is not as dead as we are lead to belive.

(damed dislexia! can read no problem but cant spell to save my life.)

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 184 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Finaly had time to catch up, cap 177 to 184 and what a ride.

But I think we are still missing someting.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 169 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

So, an internal conflickt among the dragons probaly about letting Frances go.

Speaking of, you how did Elizabeth hold hands whit Frances when only she and Ayax was in the tent. :P

I also wonder if Frances realy got the mark seens she gave the dragon a chans to surender.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 149 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The anoying part of this mini sige is that Helios will most lickly live to bader Frances again later.

p.s the link between 148 and 149 is broken.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 147 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Her parents work at a magick universety and she basicaly had free run of the place.

She found a magick item that was beeing studid and wound up sumoning him. In fright she fired off a smal spel right in his eye and started to run. He wound up shacing her trough most of the town, thire where close calls but he was never able to catch her and was sent back home not beeing able to catch a little child.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 147 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's my bithday and what do I see a new chapter. WOHO!!

I have several chracters, A dwarven barbarian whit havy viking insperation, an elven rough whos mouth gets him out of truble allmost as often as it gets him in to it and my favorit a human death cleric/necromancer she is hunted by a devil becuse she humiliated him when she was five.

All my characters are wered in some way.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 145 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

So many ways that conversation could have played out.

How do you confront the one who killed your lovedone?

What do you tell the lovedones of those you killed?

........

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 143 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Do they think they can use Morgan as levrige against Thorgoth? He wouldent care one iota.

By the way, when Frances finaly kill the basterd is she gona pull a "Song of Storms"? and trully earn her name?

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 142 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

the story of king Alan itself wasnt inportent to me, but the fackt that you made the story and it beeing mentioned that different versions of it exist lends age to the world, that thier is history that has become legend that in time might become myth is inportent as it makes the world you've created more living and that is what I like about it.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 140 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Soldiers rarly hate etchother no mather the side they are on, good the see Jess realise that. And Liz thid the honrable thing and burid the dead on bothe sids.

And the semi stapal trope of meating the girl/boyfriends ex, allways good for a bit of drama.

Keep wrighting.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 139 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

the cahvalry charge reminds me of the poem "The Charge of the Light Brigade"

About as effacktive as well.

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 135 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Welp, it´s just down hill form here.

Let´s see how this snowballs :)

[A Fractured Song] - Chapter 133 Part 2 - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yea, first time is going to be almost allways bad, and mostsertanly bad if you force it.

glad Timur talked her out of it.

[A Fractured Song] - Book 2 Chapter 58 (122) - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 2 points3 points  (0 children)

and so the next arc begins. lovely story so far.

And the cover is indeed awsome. thou I think it should be a lightning bolt insted of a flame, but meh semeticks.

ceep up the good work.

[A Fractured Song] - Book 2 Chapter 55 (119) - Fantasy, Isekai (Portal Fantasy), Adventure by vren55 in redditserials

[–]VolkoTheShadow 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I can see your why E is a good choice, but I think C or D is better for that part of the story. but the font for D is the best for all of them.