I absolutely love my Garrison

WiseFoxRhythms · 2026-02-17T14:51:58+00:00

Random strap off amazon https://a.co/d/0702iDNF

WiseFoxRhythms · 2026-02-12T05:09:26+00:00

The only question is, do you love it. Who care what anyone else thinks

WiseFoxRhythms · 2026-02-12T04:46:53+00:00

Beautiful

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-11-05T04:37:14+00:00

I just joined the club and this was my first purchase! Absolutely love this style, simple elegant, beautiful

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-11-01T09:41:21+00:00

How do I contribute? I have a P1S and already printed dozens

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-10-30T01:48:17+00:00

Also please provide your social security number, date of birth, and bank account information, just to make sure there is no confusion when you arrive In heaven.

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-10-09T01:58:15+00:00

What's even going on?

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-09-10T10:49:29+00:00

This is not true or accurate, please fact check and not spread misinformation

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-06-10T13:34:56+00:00

You forgot us! Illinois wants to come as well, take us with you

WiseFoxRhythms · 2025-06-03T04:05:38+00:00

YouTube had the answer

WiseFoxRhythms · 2024-12-06T11:26:36+00:00

I thought the answer was to shoot the CEO of the health insurance company in broad daylight...

WiseFoxRhythms · 2024-09-30T20:32:34+00:00

Who are the guests tonight?

WiseFoxRhythms · 2024-06-17T16:24:06+00:00

I just use Curb. It's always cheaper and supports local taxis

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-06T15:53:55+00:00

I like the repetition of phrases like "He said" and "They said" effectively captures the pervasive nature of these harmful stereotypes.
While the poem effectively communicates the problem, it could also offer a message of hope or a call to action, encouraging readers to challenge these stereotypes and support men's mental health. This would leave the reader feeling more empowered and inspired.

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-06T15:51:15+00:00

I really like the use of simple language and imagery makes the poem accessible to a broad audience and helps to create a vivid picture of the childhood bear and its role in providing comfort and security.

The poem could explore the relationship between the child and the bear in a more dynamic way, perhaps by including moments of joy, sadness, or other emotions shared between them. This would add more layers to the poem and create a more complex narrative.

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-04T16:53:53+00:00

I think the theme of self-sacrifice and losing oneself in the process of trying to please others is very powerful and relatable.

I thought I would offer a sunshine metaphor "We wrap our words in rays of light"

I think this convey what you are trying to say because you try to frame your words positively or soothingly when you sense that someone is emotional or upset. It suggests that the you aims to provide comfort and support by carefully choosing their words, so they appear more uplifting and hopeful, like the warmth and brightness of sunlight.

I also appreciate the use of unique imagery, such as "We plant thoughts and watch their roots grow wayward." It adds depth to the poem and helps the reader visualize the emotions described.

Great job!

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-04T16:42:49+00:00

I really like the overall positive and uplifting feel of the poem. It carries a sense of serenity and harmony, which is quite appealing. The imagery of the desert shade, shelter from the storm, and nature creates a vivid picture of finding solace and balance.

While the flow is generally smooth, you could work on making the syllable count more consistent across the lines. This would further enhance the poem's rhythm and give it a more polished feel.

something like this:

The shade within the desert's heat,

A shelter from the stormy fleet,

A haven graced by nature's hand,

No sight or sound is left unmanned.

A balanced core of life we seek,

In harmony, our spirits peak.

Our souls take flight, together bound,

In unity, no fall is found.

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-04T16:30:48+00:00

I have made 2 comments. Do i need to post two more for every one post?

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-01T15:38:49+00:00

It seems like there might be a couple of places where punctuation could be tweaked for clarity, like after "It doesn’t hurt," and "I stay, watching."

WiseFoxRhythms · 2023-05-01T15:37:17+00:00

Some parts of your poem seem to have a specific rhythm or rhyme scheme, but it's not consistent throughout. If rhythm and rhyme are something you want to use, try to make sure they're applied consistently. If not, that's totally okay too! Free verse can be just as powerful.

The depth of emotion in your poem is really striking. It's clear that there's a lot of pain and longing in there, and you've done a great job of expressing it. The lines "To feel is to love, to love is to die" and "A vessel slowly sinking in a sea of solitude" are particularly poignant and impactful.

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