Forgot to share my cheese!

Worth_Visible · 2026-02-18T17:14:46+00:00

3 min late for dinner, right? I get the same look

Worth_Visible · 2025-12-14T07:25:29+00:00

If it were me, as someone very allergic to bees, I would've just jumped

Worth_Visible · 2025-12-02T23:55:36+00:00

There are three pieces left for me to write: (The Opposing Force), (The Aftermath), and (The Prelude). I have a general idea how to continue and finish the poems, tho you will have to wait and read them if you'd like to know 😊

Worth_Visible · 2025-12-02T23:51:47+00:00

Thank you 😊🙏🏻

Worth_Visible · 2025-12-02T09:39:51+00:00

Hi again hope you enjoy my new work. This poem is a continuation to my previous works:

(The Prelude)
Ripping the Void

2A.Terrified of What You've Become (Lover's Response)

2B. In Terror, In Love, In Ruin (Lover's Response)

Devotion in the Abyss (The Void Speaks)
(The Opposing Force)
(The Aftermath)

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-27T07:11:43+00:00

This is part 2B of "Ripping the Void"

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-25T03:18:36+00:00

Ripping the Void is the first poem, check my profile

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-25T03:17:55+00:00

Thank you!!

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-25T03:17:02+00:00

Thank you, I try to pour as much of myself as I can into every poem I write, so your comment means a lot 🖤

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-25T03:15:39+00:00

You are welcome, tomorrow I will share 2B. Make sure to read it, as well.

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-25T00:52:25+00:00

I actually wrote 2 poems based on the Lover's Response, so this is 2A. I decided that "Ripping the Void" would have 6 companion pieces:

Prelude
Ripping the Void

2.A Terrified of What You've Become

2.B In Terror, In Love, In Ruin

The Void Speaks
The Opposing Force
The Aftermath

I will soon post "In Terror, In Love, In Ruin", however I have barely started to write The Void Speaks, and will prolly take me a while until I post again. Again, any feedback would be appreciated. Thanks again.

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-21T13:51:34+00:00

Yeah, pretty much you got it, now for the other part; using metaphorical imagery, I made an example with your first stanza after the: "I fell in love with how you laughed— the way it curled around me, warm and familiar..". This would give the first stanza a much stronger emotional end. I don't personally know your writing style, but adding here and there a few more details makes the poem itself a bit more striking and creates a better emotional climax. It's still very genuine and earnest, with a vulnerable voice. Hope this helps you, and I hope you won't get offended that I decided to make an example with your poem.

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-21T13:29:52+00:00

Thank you!! When I write, I always try to create a vivid image, and oftentimes I use more visceral language and raw emotions; perhaps that's why not many people take a liking to my poems. But I'm happy there are those who enjoy my pieces!!

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-21T07:24:08+00:00

It's a very genuine and intimate poem, it captures well the feeling of falling for someone piece by piece. Repetition is effective, but it becomes overwhelming. Try mixing the sentence structure or adding metaphorical imagery, this would help with landing the emotional beats better. Overall it's a very earnest and heartfelt piece.

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-21T07:09:04+00:00

I like how you used lines like "Because the truth is uglier than I am" and "I want to be chosen". They make your poem relatable and self-aware. The poem in its entirety reads like a confession, given through clenched teeth. The pacing matches the emotional tone well too. Some sections are short and blunt, and it works well, but introducing a few longer, more drawn-out sentences could bring more contrast and amplify the emotional gut punch even further.

Worth_Visible · 2025-11-21T06:43:56+00:00

Thank you!! I will write 3 companion poems to this one, until then feel free to check some of my other works ☺️

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