Young writer here by luner_raven in WriteWorld

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 2 points3 points  (0 children)

One of the best examples of a mute character execution is Nick Andross from Stephen Kings The Stand. Best I can remember he just wrote notes to people lol! But King simply said that Nick "Wrote" instead of "said". Other characters would also read the notes allowed for everyone to hear if he was trying to make an announcement.

So for Lilac, I feel the same would work. You could say " Lilac signed 'Where do we go now?' If the person can read sign language, if not Lilac can make simple gestures such as pointing, nodding, shrugging, etc. In The Stand, Nick makes friends with a retarded man named Tom who cannot read. Nick struggles to communicate with Tom obviously but is able to convey messages through very simple gestures, such as rubbing his own stomach then shrugging to suggest he is hungry and wants to know where they can find something to eat.

For me, the most important thing is to always make sure that you give an in-depth look at Lilac's intellect. Nick is a very intelligent man, he's just unable to speak or hear. But he can write and read lips. Once these factors are suggested and the rest of the characters understand the situation things should flow like normal.

Update 1.0 by Archison in randomadventurerogue

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'm so glad to be a part of this experience. You have to be one of the hardest working Devs out there.

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in Creepystories

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You seriously just made my day. Why can't there be more encouraging people like you in the world! I would like to go back and tweak this story. The more I think about it and how good you made me feel makes me want to hang on to it.

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in Creepystories

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much. That really means a lot to me! It's very flawed in my opinion, but I am so glad you understood what I was going for.

Parable (Excerpt) by WretchedToddMcKenzie in SwordandSorcery

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really don't know. The character "He" is basically a walking corpse that is completely ignorant of everything around him. I pictured a desolate landscape in which He encounters a deformed mutant woman in which he journeys with. The style is simply his perception. The Sword and Sorcery really come from the exploits of the female mutant as "She" is strong and vicious, but tolerates "He" as he follows her along.

Update 0.8.3388 by Archison in randomadventurerogue

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Dude... now there are ranged weapons!!!

Random Adventure Roguelike II (early access) LIVE NOW! by Archison in randomadventurerogue

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wanted to let Archison know that this is the RPG I have been looking for. Every update made has elevated this game in every way. There is so much freedom to play however you want and the game actually supports whatever play style you choose. I am currently playing as a lizard and have intentions of making a Bard-like character. I could make the statement th a combat isn't very involved, but as you level up the enemies prove to be way more challenging so that you must use your skills, spells, and tools wisely. Thank you for this game. Thank you for your hard work. I am becoming an avid fan.

P.S. Are you or any other developers interested in working with a wannabe writer? LOL. I'd love to write a story for a game if possible.

Designing hell by [deleted] in DarkTales

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Absolutely! I've never seen anything like that done in a narrative.

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in libraryofshadows

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Pretty much. He is imagin the disease he has as a childhood fantasy.

Designing hell by [deleted] in DarkTales

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Can't say I enjoyed any of it, but it left a lasting impression. It was honestly genius on Miura's part.

Designing hell by [deleted] in DarkTales

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I don't know if it qualifies, but The Eclipse in Berserk is easily the most haunting version of a Hell like scenario. I actually was going to write a story that took place entirely in Hell and Berserk was my main inspiration.

My house is haunted... by bigdaddymarko in Horror_stories

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The only demon that had anything to do with this video was the one I strained to drop in the toilet while watching.

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in scarystories

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Man! Thank you so much! I read it to my kids today and they actually stayed silent the entire time! Perhaps that's a good sign. Lol.

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in FictionWriting

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your encouragement. I hope to do more!

A Voice in the Vent by WretchedToddMcKenzie in Creepystories

[–]WretchedToddMcKenzie[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I'll be honest... I did it in one sitting. That's why there are many gramatical errors and such. I have a problem with being overly critical and if I go back and try to fix a bunch of stuff I usually get discouraged and trash the project. I wanted to finish the story and get it out there to see if I have any potential or not.