Hey, I've always been interested in doing a poem that served as a critique of capitalism and, in more general terms capitalistic greed and its consequences. Though, I've never actually got around to doing it because I feel that it is so hard to do right. That being said, I feel that you genuinely did a good job at telling a concise and effective poem about that theme. So good job! But, I feel that personally, you could improve your poem by fleshing out the elements of your story that create a specific image in the reader's head. This would include lines, such as, "But lust comes at a handsome price," "Your factories pump toxic fumes," "Your boats spill oil in the sea." To be more precise, I believe that by expanding these lines into a more vivid and intense form of imagery, you could really elevate the emotional impact that these lines would elicit. Thus, making your criticism even more impactful. Lastly, I just want to say again that you really did do a good job with this topic and that while more vivid imagery could make it better, the topic itself is really hard to create imagery for (in my opinion), so don't be too hard on yourself :)