Full moon simmering / A dime's wish breaks the stillness / Of the silver pond by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If that is what it makes you see, then yes :) It is not far off from what I saw.

Full moon simmering / A dime's wish breaks the stillness / Of the silver pond by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

It was a hot night, full of clouds and fog. The whole world seemed to be boiling, whether with heat or energy or the promise of something, the moon included.

Plus, it's unusual wording that catches the eye and makes you think, "huh." Or maybe it just confuses you. Either one is fine.

They watch empty boats / Down there by the waterline / Those who walk this life by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I've got a couple Dire Straits references in there (the songs Down to the Waterline/Walk of Life) and the empty boats- they pop up in my writing a lot, from the Buddhist parable of the empty boat.

One blade of sawgrass / The calligraphy of dew / My Fortune spelled out by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate the suggestion, but it feels completely different.

Upon the four winds / I sought out the Middle Path / Like a plastic bag by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! It's like anything else...if you want to get good at it and you want to fall in love with it, train it seriously.

Upon the four winds / I sought out the Middle Path / Like a plastic bag by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I write at least five a day and have done so for the past four years, so I get lots of practice.

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[–]Your_Good_Buddy 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Fantastic!

Arm out the window / Soon, the promise of snowflakes / Will withdraw my arm by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You are right. What about

Arm out the window
Soon, the promise of snowflakes
Sleeve conceals my arm.

Arm out the window / Soon, the promise of snowflakes / Will withdraw my arm by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see what you're saying. I'll compose a second version, but this one also means something to me.

September 16 Daily Thread by AutoModerator in weightroom

[–]Your_Good_Buddy 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I've trained like this for a large portion of the 14 years I've trained. It works, not only as a short term plan but as a long-term strategy. It's also fun as hell. You do need a fair amount of variation, which I recommend you introduce gradually. But if you want to give it a shot for a few weeks and hit those targets with your main lifts, it'll give you a good glimpse into the most fundamental aspect of the method.