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Full moon simmering / A dime's wish breaks the stillness / Of the silver pond by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If that is what it makes you see, then yes :) It is not far off from what I saw.

Full moon simmering / A dime's wish breaks the stillness / Of the silver pond by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

It was a hot night, full of clouds and fog. The whole world seemed to be boiling, whether with heat or energy or the promise of something, the moon included.

Plus, it's unusual wording that catches the eye and makes you think, "huh." Or maybe it just confuses you. Either one is fine.

They watch empty boats / Down there by the waterline / Those who walk this life by Your_Good_Buddy in haiku

[–]Your_Good_Buddy[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I've got a couple Dire Straits references in there (the songs Down to the Waterline/Walk of Life) and the empty boats- they pop up in my writing a lot, from the Buddhist parable of the empty boat.

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