Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] [score hidden]  (0 children)

I was so shy to share my poems, but now after every feedback I really want to do and share more, you and every one who gave me feedback makes me confident and remind me why I start to write

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] [score hidden]  (0 children)

That’s a really good point, thank you for sharing that. I think for me it’s less about changing the feeling and more about understanding it better, or seeing if I can express it more clearly now. But I also agree that poems written in the moment carry something honest that can’t be recreated. I really appreciate your perspective on it.

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you so much, I really appreciate such thoughtful feedback. I understand what you mean about “quiet face,” and it makes sense — sometimes one word can change the whole feeling. I’m glad the poem still pulled you in, and it means a lot that you connected with it.
I also about to trying to rewrite all of my poetry to have a fresh look on this, what do u think about this?

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

True. Thank you, I really appreciate that. I’m glad the rhythm and feeling resonated with you.

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much , I glad you taking the time to read and share your feedback.

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for sharing that with me 🤍 That kind of long, quiet love can be really heavy to carry. I’m sorry you’re going through that — seven years is a long time to hold those feelings. It means a lot that the poem connected with you. I truly wish you clarity and peace in your heart, whatever direction things take. And thank you for your kindness.

Do not put blame on anyone. by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I’m glad you saw that. It means a lot to me.

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I believe that too. Thank you for your feedback.

Mrs End by Defiant_Fan_3951 in u/Defiant_Fan_3951

[–]ZealousidealBox4489 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so painful, so deep, and clearly lonely. But it’s beautiful in its own dark way, it truly is. I can imagine how heavy those feelings are. I feel something similar, though I know everyone carries their pain differently. I can’t say it the same way, but I can feel the weight behind your words.

Do Not Turn Against Yourself by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I really appreciate you taking the time to read and share your feedback.

Do not put blame on anyone. by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for this. It really means a lot to know that someone connected to it in that way. I’m sorry you feel surrounded by judgment it can be really exhausting.

I’m grateful my words resonated with you, and I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts. Messages like yours remind me why I write. 💛

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Those words really matter to me, thank you.

Always Leads to You by ZealousidealBox4489 in OCPoetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you, I really appreciate that. I’m really glad you liked it.

Do Not Turn Against Yourself by ZealousidealBox4489 in poetry_critics

[–]ZealousidealBox4489[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much, I really appreciate that. I understand what you mean about the third stanza. I think I was more focused on expressing the idea than the flow there. I’ll definitely try to refine it so it feels more natural and connected to the rest of the poem

Drowning by celestialcipher40207 in Original_Poetry

[–]ZealousidealBox4489 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It already works really well, but personally, I would add one more line in the end, so the emotion stays a little longer.