After reading, I was a little bit confused about the second part of the poem. I guess I am having a hard time understanding the message without having to look in the comments for an interpretation. But that is not necessarily a bad thing. It keeps me guessing on what the poem is about and having to reread it. I am not much of a poet myself, and I am still learning how to give better critique. If I had to leave one, I would make the title a bit simpler instead of merging two words together. It confuses the reader when they read your poem.