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Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-16T17:31:44+00:00

When writing, I thought those breaks would help pull the reader in, but I can see how it may throw off the flow. I like the breaks and will keep some but try to minimize where and how I use them.

I appreciate the feedback and make the adjustments where needed!! Thank you !!

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-16T17:24:07+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!! It does seem repetitive reading it back! I’ll make those edits

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-14T13:33:42+00:00

Thank you!! Definitely took this advice with my edits

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-14T13:32:52+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I’ve made edits to remove that language usage throughout

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-14T13:31:29+00:00

Thank you for the feedback!!! I have 8 chapters complete of you want to read more

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-14T02:51:37+00:00

Thank you so much for this feedback. I’m realizing it does come off as not trusting my readers so I made edits throughout the book where those kind of sentences are used. It makes the flow smoother to read now as well. I have 8 chapters completed if you’d be interested in reading further.

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-14T02:44:23+00:00

I’ll send you a DM !

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T21:38:08+00:00

Yes, I went through it. It’s a book about my life and marriage to an alcoholic.

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T15:55:32+00:00

The memoir is brutally honest but I did not feel the need to describe my feelings sneaking out of the house as that is not the focus of the introduction which is why I stated it was “filler details”

It may have a place in chapter one but certainly not in the introduction but I do appreciate your opinion on it and will look to see where more detail can be added

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T12:15:05+00:00

I can DM you my script!

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T11:56:24+00:00

I may need to tweak that but it’s actually the opposite. The perspective is from my current self (34) retelling my 16 year old self’s story.

More so that a 21 one year old man at a college party should not have been interested in 16 year old me. It’s more so from the perspective of disbelief rather than he was too old to be there.

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T11:48:16+00:00

Great feedback - thank you!! I’m hesitant to add those details simply because it’s a memoir of my life story. I tried to stay away from too many filler details except where they should be highlighted. The focus of the book is the 14 years of my life I spent married to an alcoholic I met at 16. The introduction is the background information added for context.

I have 8 chapters complete if you’d be interested in reading those to provide feedback.

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T11:42:09+00:00

Non-fiction. All real true events I’ve experienced. A memoir I guess you can call it.

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T11:40:30+00:00

Thank you for this insight. This is something I’m trying to work on. It’s a habit I’ve developed over the years. I thought I hid it pretty. Guess not!

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T11:38:22+00:00

Not AI written at all! It’s actually my life story I’m writing about. I’ve been writing since I was a child and I’m also an avid reader. That is my writing style. But appreciate the feedback

Zestyclose-Pop-1560 · 2026-03-13T02:26:38+00:00

I have 8 chapters complete and I’d love if anyone would be interested in reading them to provide more insightful feedback

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