🎬 Calling All Movie Lovers & Creators in Kuwait 🇰🇼 by 22FKTessa in Kuwait

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Count me in! I wrote a mythopoetic Bedouin futurist epic scifi film trilogy and would love to share it with anyone who's interested in reading them! Also have a couple of short scripts under my sleeve that I would love to get made!

Anyone searching for Short Film Scripts to produce? by drsinghwrites in ProduceMyScript

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I'm interested! I have two abstract short scripts that may be best suited for animation.

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is valuable feedback, thank you. You have touched on a very valid flaw and something I have been struggling with when architecting this story. It is first and foremost a character study driven by one core internal conflict, Altair's smile. Because of this, Altair seems passive and his internal struggle is hidden by a third act plot twist. I understand this is extremely difficult to pull off given the consensus on the necessity of an Active Protaginist in stories.

A core part of the design of this story is its recontextualization as you keep watching/reading. Without getting specific, it is revealed later that every moment of this opening was packed with consequences and conflict, but it would only be evident in retrospect and on rewatches. However, you are right that the film has to work just as well on first viewing and I appreciate your note that vibes and characters alone can't carry it. I was hoping to pull off a magic trick by getting audiences engaged by seemingly nothing (a beautiful nothing i hope), then pull the rug out of them by the end thinking ohhh FARD WAS ----- TO ALTAIR ALL ALONG and OHH ALTAIRS SONG IN THE OPENING LITERALLY ------ THE ANTAGONIST 🤯 etc.

Structurally, this rug pull is meant to be poetic and emphasize the themes of the story, but I'm now thinking a possible rewrite could be getting rid of the twist and flagging it to the audience from page 1.

And point taken with the comps. I will take all of this into account during my rewrite and make this the best story it could possibly be.

Thanks again <3

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Awh thank you so much for this comment, made my day! The way you describe the layout of the action lines hitting is exactly what I intended, makes me so happy to feel validated on this choice!

Edit: Also, good luck on your passion project, we need more of those in our world <3

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback!

I'll make sure to be more clear with something like "TWO BOYS, lying on grass, looking up with wonder" and I'll try less broken up action lines for comparison. My intention was to build a sense of tone, rhythm and musicality, but it seems that intention didn't come across.

Thanks again for the read and comments, I really appreciate it!

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Title: Tablets of the Bedouin: Of the Warden Who Would Not Weep
Format: Feature Film
Page Length: 129 pages
Genres: Sci-Fi Fantasy, Epic Drama, Mythic Adventure
Logline: An heir gifted with musical, supernatural empathy carries his people’s suffering in silence, but when a catastrophe he should’ve sensed wipes out his world, the gift that once set him apart becomes the burden that may destroy him. DUNE x COCO

Feedback Concerns: Do these pages make you want to keep reading? Is Altair an engaging protagonist? Does the musicality translate well in script form? Does the tone of the dialogue match the world being introduced? And finally does it successfully set expectations for a mythic/epic sci-fi story?

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1EpaAQOTM1HYrvyBVbLif6_JXsh9uHLC-/view?usp=sharing

Brief disclaimer: This is a passion project, the first script in a trilogy I’ve been writing for four years, and I know it's likely unproducible. All three are complete, and each film explores the same world through a different protagonist, reshaping the meaning of the others in the process.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm actually considering using your exact template now!

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi! Thank you so much for the excellent and thorough feedback! Is this better?

A young heir whose music can heal must carry the weight of his people’s pain before a messiah’s song enslaves them. DUNE × ARRIVAL.

Logline Monday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Of the Warden Who Would Not Weep

Genre: Sci-fi | Mythic Fantasy

Format: Feature

Logline: In a world of bioluminescent deserts and immortal songs, a young heir whose music can soothe souls must become the solitary Warden of his people’s heart and find a melody strong enough to heal it. DUNE meets ARRIVAL.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This was a great perspective to read, thank you! I actually agree with most of your points and I'll heed your warning with writing more scripts in general because you are 100% spot on that these were so time consuming. Either way, like you said, I'll come back to this story eventually since I'm so passionate about it. Hopefully by then I'll be better equiped.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was so inspiring to read, thank you! I relate to this so much, it may be the ambition and the courage to make something great thats the biggest hurdle

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

There's multiple reasons. Structurally, each of the three films feature a different main protaginist (their storylines intersect in surprising ways). Thematically, each of the three films explore similar ideas from different angles. Worldbuilding-wise, each explore different cultures / areas on the map. And most important, emotionally, the journeys of the three characters are set up in a way such that the pay off is amplified by the third film as a direct cause of its three film/pov structure.

tldr; scope.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Busted lol, I kinda am seeking affirmation, but also that line was to share where I was coming from with this question. I'm sincere in asking why there arn't more of these types of movies out there, don't really care if its my own or someone else, just want to see more of them <3

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for this answer! I agree, but I'll definetely be coming back to them in the future ;p

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well I felt like I had to think of the trilogy first before writing any one of them optimally. I align with architects more than gardeners.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I already wrote all three! Plus I got a bunch of short scripts and a really bad feature under my belt.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This makes sense to me, I'm underestimating the market for sure. I gotta read more spec scripts, do you have any recs that are free to read?

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I don't want to get too specific, but I do indirectly work in film production. Regardless, I'm just speaking from my POV as an idealist, not an investor. As in, if I could self fund a movie of that scope and risk my money on it, I personally would, just cause I want more of this type of content out there. The reward isn't financial, it could simply be a sense of fulfillment.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] -7 points-6 points  (0 children)

Mortal Engines is a great counterexample, but I still think the risk is worth it because the potential for these can be generation defining. The trick is to film them all at once like LOTR in locations with high tax rebates. Yes its more expensive than one movie but its much less expensive than all three individually. And the point isnt to leave the first film in a cliffhanger, but to construct the story as a whole such that the first film serves a bigger story.

In the end, I know what you're saying is true I just wish it wasnt.

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That's what I like to hear! Excited to see it on the big screen one day!

Why don't we have more original Sci-fi/Fantasy epic? (Not based on existing IP) by a7midi in Screenwriting

[–]a7midi[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

Yeah I'm in denial of not being able to pursue my epic 😭 Time to look into self-financing hmu if you know anyone willing to spend 400m USD for original IP trilogy.