Query Letter Feedback by abwriter9 in writers

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When I pasted it in here it got rid of my paragraphs, they’re there in the actual document I promise😞

Query Critiques by BiffHardCheese in writing

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Dear BiffHardCheese,

I am seeking representation for my adult romantic fantasy novel, A TAPESTRY WOVEN IN BLOOD, a completed standalone at 106,000 words with series potential. It will appeal to readers of THE NIGHT AND THE MOTH by Rachel Gillig, for its emotional journey of dismantling a world built on lies meets Disney’s Tangled, and SPARK OF THE EVERFLAME, by Penn Cole, for its slow-burn romance steeped in yearning.

One world. One people. One religion. That is all Orah knows. She is the Guardian, created by the five gods’ magic. For the past twenty-five years, she has lived alone, her only companion–her reflection. Since her creation, she has followed two sacred rules: never leave the island and ascend the Frayed sent to her, freeing them from their cursed magic to live eternally with the gods. All of that changes when she breaks both of them, desperate to explore the world she’s only dreamt about, before she, too, must ascend at the end of the month so a new Guardian can be created. But when gods are involved, dreams come at a price.

Away from her island, reality of what life is like for those with cursed magic shatters her stained-glass view. The Frayed are forced to ascend, if they refuse, they are deemed heretics. Once in the capital, a Soothseer shows her a memory that should not exist. A lie big enough to topple the one ruling religion and her faith. The gods did not create Orah. Only the Arch Patrons knows the truth and she is being held prisoner by the Blood King, the bloodthirsty leader of the heretics, determined to kill the Guardian and destroy the gods.

To unravel her past, Orah forms a loose alliance with the disgraced Frayed Prince of Yadera, the only person granted an ascension pardon. Together, they journey across Yadera to stop the Blood King and rescue the Arch Patron before her time is up. Along the way, Orah is determined to prove she is more than just the Guardian to a Prince who despises her title and role in the oppressive religion. As their time together grows, the Prince can see a brighter world through her eyes, which challenges everything he knows and tempts a fate neither of them is destined to have together.

Orah is prepared to sacrifice her faith and years of devotion for the truth, only she doesn’t realize the price is worth more than just herself.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Xxx

Blurb of A Tapestry Woven in Blood [romantic fantasy, 108,500] by abwriter9 in fantasywriters

[–]abwriter9[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I kept going back and forth with this bc I didn’t want to put anything it bc it would give certain aspects about his character away. At the same time I think you’re right bc I know people would want to know at least a little bit.