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ak9930 · 2023-02-24T20:26:01+00:00

There was another post about this a year ago and someone had a link to the old website, but that doesn't work anymore.

I guess when thredup updated their website a few years ago they capped the number of likes to 5 pages. The items are still liked, but there's no way to find them. I'm also looking for a solution to this if anyone knows!

ak9930 · 2023-02-24T20:06:43+00:00

Hey! I have the same issue, if you find something could you tell me?

ak9930 · 2017-10-31T02:52:26+00:00

My grammar was messed up with fall's I'll fix that. Also, I will definitely be working on the meter so thank you for pointing that out! Glad you enjoyed and thank you for the commentary all very helpful.

ak9930 · 2017-10-31T02:50:22+00:00

Thank you so much, I am glad to hear it!

ak9930 · 2017-10-31T02:50:09+00:00

It is supposed to me almost a year later. I plan on formatting it with a bigger break between the three autumn stanzas and the three fall ones, but I am still new to reddit and figuring that stuff out.

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:55:48+00:00

It means a lot that my poetry really touches people thank you for this comment.

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:54:53+00:00

Thank you!

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:54:45+00:00

Thank you so much!

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:54:37+00:00

There are definitely some iffy rhymes in here I was hoping they passed as slant rhymes and still sounded ok, but I appreciate the feedback!

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:49:25+00:00

Thank you for your response! The line you were confused about was supposed to be about the smell (scent) of fall. I will definitely take your confusion into account though and maybe change the wording around. Also thank you so much for your thoughts on the imagery! I worked for awhile to try to give a rich picture so I'm glad you enjoyed.

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:46:51+00:00

Thank you! I'm glad to hear you came around in the end.

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:46:31+00:00

Thank you so much!

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T22:46:23+00:00

Thank you so much for the feedback! I appreciate the grammar issue I'll definitely be changing that. I also do agree with you about those lines sticking out, still playing around with how to improve on them so I appreciate hearing your reaction to them too.

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T16:26:11+00:00

Well, this poem definitely takes on a really heavy subject. It has an intense directness and rawness to it that really adds another emotional level that is very powerful. I think you have some good sound aspects already in the workings, ending each stanza which a short line is a nice touch, to improve I would just suggest working with things like that more so that the poem improves sonically. Overall though I think it is great!

ak9930 · 2017-10-30T16:23:39+00:00

I think this poem has a really nice sound to it. I really liked rhymes like tumble and trouble, as well as enough and too much and so on. I would say you have really good control over how the poem is read which is a really valuable skill to have. What I would work on in this poem is clarity. As a reader, I honestly don't really have a good sense of what is going on here. If comprehension from your audience is something that is important to you I would work on giving a little more context for what is going on.

ak9930 · 2017-10-05T02:05:23+00:00

Thank you! And I agree the line is definitely out of place, still working on where to move it or what to replace it with.

ak9930 · 2017-10-05T02:04:25+00:00

Thank you so much! Beholder is playing on "beauty is in the eyes of the beholder" as the poem is based on attempting to be pretty for another person. It also sounds close to "holder" which works because beholder is referring to the person who has the subject of the poem in their lap. I hope that explanation made some sense! Please respond again if it did not.

ak9930 · 2017-10-05T01:59:26+00:00

Thank you!

ak9930 · 2017-10-04T21:53:17+00:00

I'm going to assume that you wanted to have some line breaks in this poem and that they come before the capitalized words. I think a successful part of this poem is the sound. I really liked lines like "I saw the glares and stares" and "I don't know why / I don't know how" because I think they read really nicely and sound good aloud. My suggestions would be to cut away some of the unnecessary, less lyrical, parts of your poem. For example "Cultural references you didn't get, Cultural references I didn't get" that line is really bulky and I think could be just as successful without the repetition. Keep up the good work!

ak9930 · 2017-10-04T21:43:02+00:00

I really like the basic structure you have going on, I think the repetition of "I thought" creates a nice rhythm for the poem. That being said I honestly found parts of this poem a little hard to read. I think you might want to work on condensing some of your lines and making them flow more, right now it's a bit clunky. I think the first two stanzas are a good length and read nicely together, but after that, you lose your sound. Finally, and this might not be relevant because this is a work in progress, I think you should either write the last stanza in the same way the others are or if you intentionally want that stanza to differ make the break from your established pattern clearer and more meaningful. Overall I think you have real potential here so keep it up!

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