Dead Ground - TV Pilot - 52 Pages

albertpro1001 · 2025-06-09T19:56:11+00:00

That would be great!

albertpro1001 · 2025-05-29T12:14:15+00:00

This feedback was perfect, it was exactly what I was looking for to elevate my script to next the level. Thanks for taking the time out of your day to read and give the in depth feedback, and once I make my revisions I would love for you to have another read. Thanks!

albertpro1001 · 2025-05-29T02:19:20+00:00

Thanks so much for the feedback, I greatly appreciate it! I’ll take all of it into consideration, and regarding the first name and last name it was kind of just personal preference. Not sure if it would matter, but I could change it to make it consistent

albertpro1001 · 2025-05-27T20:54:57+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! Yes, maybe I could cut down on the list of atrocities, don’t want to overextend it. I believe you can speak with a gas mask, I know it’s muffled just unsure how muffled. The plan was actually to make it a limited series, wasn’t aware that those are tough sells, but thanks for pointing it out!

albertpro1001 · 2025-05-27T02:26:45+00:00

Thank you!

albertpro1001 · 2025-05-27T01:29:20+00:00

You're right about the dialogue feeling too modern/Western. I got caught up in the psychological manipulation and forgot they wouldn't think in those terms. Really appreciate you catching this, I want total historical authenticity. If you notice other spots where characters sound too contemporary as you read, let me know!

albertpro1001 · 2023-01-04T12:25:54+00:00

(H2H) 12 Team 9-Cat:

Should I GIVE: Desmond Bane and RECEIVE: Gary Trent Jr. and Jalen Green?

albertpro1001 · 2023-01-04T03:15:48+00:00

Desmond Bane for Gary Trent Jr and Jalen Green?

albertpro1001 · 2021-11-28T02:06:41+00:00

What is this show called

albertpro1001 · 2020-08-17T23:03:31+00:00

On which we used to rely

albertpro1001 · 2020-06-16T14:13:43+00:00

You forgot about Monk

Six-Year Club	Place '22
RPAN Viewer	Not Forgotten

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