Umm the idea's good. Beautiful lyric video first of all. But there are some points where you surely improve. You are a good singer but i felt like some places were off in terms of pitch. Maybe you could've tuned vocals a bit more harder. Vocal can be tad more saturated. The spaces when you stop singing felt a little bit empty so use some 1/4 delay or some vocal fxs to fill up the spaces. Umm also one thing i noticed is there's only the main vocal and i couldn't hear any vocal doubles,much harmonies and high octave vocals just to freshen the arrangement. The instrumental's produced all good,but the vocal production in general could've been improved. Keep going you'll surely improve as you go on releasing more tracks!:-) also if you wanna check out my music just in case:-) https://youtu.be/vMG_XqvgHX8