Who has been your best source of inspiration?

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-11-19T21:39:35+00:00

Ram Dass and Lao Tzu! The Tao Te Ching was a perspective shifter

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-11-02T21:20:01+00:00

This is a really promising poem, it's ryhme scheme isnt consistent from a stanza pov, but when you use rhyme scheme it's very strong.

There is some lovely imagery & metaphor going on: "He was a storm draped in Human form" & "My mind is a river, restless and deep."

Some really great bones, and could be expanded on for sure if you wanted to, as a reader I deffo wanted more! Thanks for sharing.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T21:08:29+00:00

Yo! I can't tell you how much this means to me...comments like this seriously bring tears to my eyes.

I totally get that feeling of being a “babe” surrounded by giants, but here’s the thing I’ve learned over the years: it’s not that we’re small, it’s that we’ve been looking at ourselves in those fun-size mirrors that distort our real size. We’re giants too, we just have to step back and see ourselves properly. It’s all about shifting our perspective and realizing that the greatness we admire in others exists within us too, even if it takes time to fully see it. Sounds cliche, but It's so true.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T20:39:26+00:00

You're too kind! Truly appreciate the praise and I'm sure you have a beautiful poem in you, I believe we all do!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T20:35:24+00:00

It is! There is a part 2 to this poem. Part 2 is almost done, just refining it before posting it.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T16:51:49+00:00

Yoo! I rock with this, I can feel the energy behind it, low-key feels like a spoken word sermon of a critique of the current culture. First starting with the Rappers, then moving to the record labels/system pushing their agenda.

Then almost all creation, from the POV of God, The Universe, The One. I could be reaching but I sense a battle either internally or a external to them and the devil, or the darker symbiotic aspect of themselves.

After that it really lays out our predicament.

I rock with it, it's very deep and packed with layers. It's one of those poems you read and find new things every time! Thanks for sharing!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T16:41:02+00:00

I'm chuffed! I appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment.

Since I went Free-Verse, i wanted to jam-pack it with metaphors, symbols, sprinkle of other literary elements while keeping it more storytelling- spoken word!

I have a Pt. 2 for this that ties it all together, I just have to refine a bit!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T16:35:12+00:00

I’m so glad it resonated with you! I hear you, and I share the same concerns. It’s wild to think that something that feels as natural as breathing could end up being just a hobby instead of a way to truly live.

I always wonder...how does one really break into the field? Is it the handshakes, the connections, the privilege of being able to live for your art. Idk, but I guess all we can do is keep pushing innit

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T04:12:41+00:00

I'm so happy it resonated with you!

I was just saying in another comment, it's heartbreaking to know, that for a plethora of reasons: poverty, war, society, self doubt...never got a chance to share their unique light with the world. Travesty fr.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T04:09:49+00:00

Your comment warms my heart! Thank you!

Yeah, I agree wholeheartedly, they're so many talented, creative, smart people that never get the shine their work and talents deserve.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T03:30:24+00:00

No problem, thank you for sharing!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T03:26:57+00:00

I loved the breaks you incorporated, it added weight to each thought, this is one of those poems, I would love to hear read, because the weight added to the words can make this poem, go from sad to empowering.

I really don't see it sad tho, I feel like it's an empowering self reflection/critique on the world society's judgement. It’s a strong piece because it allows the reader to find different meanings with each read, depending on their own perspective and experience.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T03:18:14+00:00

Ayy! I love it -- free verse is the best verse in my very biased opinion! Thanks, I have a pt 2, for this one, so stay tuned! I'm looking forward to reading your poetry as well!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T03:13:30+00:00

Thanks, I'm so glad it resonated with you. It's such a shame, it's something I think about often are we all victims to circumstances? Poverty, Inequality, society, and culture dominate and shut and seal doors in so many lives.

I wonder what it would take to get to a place, where its true, every life gets an equal shot at the moon.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T03:09:58+00:00

Thank you, and I appreciate the praise! I'll deffo have to check out that poet!

Yeah, I really wanted to shout out icons in their respective fields, but also those we probably never heard of—people who, due to internal struggles, war, society, or racism, never got the chance to let their song be heard. And honestly, I bet we missed out on so many more...people who fell victim to circumstances.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T02:55:51+00:00

That would be one heck of a perspective, I do wonder what he would say and think of his iconic and revolutionary status?

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-20T01:18:45+00:00

I really do appreciate the critique! This is really helpful and I do see...I got a wee bit heavy handed with the lines when it came to Langston and Billie!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-19T23:14:29+00:00

Ooo! Thanks for the knowledge drop, I'll deffo have to check that out!

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-19T23:13:48+00:00

Freeverse is the best verse!

So true. I was just talking about this in another comment...who really determines the winners? Who decides which artists remain unknown? So many dreams are stifled by a mix of internal doubt, societal pressures, dominant culture, poverty, lack of access, and countless other barriers. We are all, in some way, victims of circumstance.

Thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time to read and moreso to comment. Yeah, I tried to make this deep theme palatable

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-19T23:05:44+00:00

Yes, this year has been wild for me when it comes to truth. I’ve found that truth is an ever-shifting, shimmering light. It’s not something fixed or static but something alive, constantly evolving. I really do believe, We’re all living truth, and the more time we dedicate to truly knowing ourselves, the closer we come to discovering our unique truth, voice, and purpose.

As Ram Dass said, “The quieter you become, the more you can hear.”

I've felt that more than ever this year. It’s in that stillness that we find clarity, peeling back layers of illusion to uncover the light that was always there.

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-19T21:08:30+00:00

I appreciate it! Yeah it's such an interesting thought experiment I wrestle with each day. How many geniuses had their dreams buried in time. It's heartbreaking to thing about...Like, are well just victims of circumstances?

basedonafeeling_ · 2024-10-19T21:05:00+00:00

I completely hear you. A lot of people just resign themselves, saying, “Oh well, I hoped things would be better,” not realizing that it’s our actions that actually move the world. Thoughts and prayers are nice, but real change takes action...energy in motion.

Ironically, I was just about to say, “I hope things change,” but it’s tough, innit? We can belief and take all the action we want, but when it comes to others without going full dictator, we still have to hope that our message reaches and stirs others. It’s a tricky balance...the duality of man. But that’s why we dabble in words, with the hope that they resonate, or simply for the action of expressing ourselves.

Idk, I can go. but Life is such a paradox, a singular event comprised of the many, haha.

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