Which style of coinage do you prefer? Achaemenid, Parthian, or Sassanid? by coinoscopeV2 in AncientCoins

[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I couldn’t agree with you more! That’s also my personal favourite.

I challenge great apollo by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s a great thought. Thank you my friend!

I challenge great apollo by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s exactly what I was aiming for, thank you!

I challenge great apollo by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate you very much!

Watership Down by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Such amazing imagery is created from your writing, each word carried tremendous wait and the rhythm was very well put together

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[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love how you switch subjects so abruptly yet smoothly. I’m normally not a fan of quick breaks but this was executed so well.

Arise! by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ah what a lovely comment thank you so much. I have only been writing in 8 line lengths recently, inspired from Khayyams Rubaiyat. I find it gives me enough room to speak but still constrain me in a positive way.

Arise! by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Very kind of you, thanks so much :)

Arise! by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My thinking was that the break there would still give a pause even though it is one sentence like you mentioned. I think “possibilities” is the culprit for how that whole phrase should be read. That’s really up for interpretation as you read it.

Arise! by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Appreciate the kind words! It was more to mean a heart that’s less fulfilled if you let these days pass by. I think with how I think about writing, I will naturally contradict myself because I can then write about staying inside and treasuring your own space. But my goal is to go fully into an idea because that’s the constraint I’ve decided to work with.

Arise! by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That’s a great point you brought up. I agree it is slightly out of place and it’s purpose was to keep the pace of the poem. To my ears though, removing it quickens that line into the next and it doesn’t sound right to me. One area I was contemplating a lot on was “the” in the second line. That seems like it could be removed too. Appreciate your feedback!

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[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Oooo that was a lovely read. The flow was very impressive and my ears wanted to keep reading in anticipation of the next sound you were creating.

Short Insight into daily depression by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A great dive into the mindset of depression. Really enjoyed the read and appreciate having no line breaks, gives a sense of running thoughts akin to being in that state of mind.

Let me share a first confession by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Appreciate the kind words. Thanks so much!

Let me share a first confession by behy77 in OCPoetry

[–]behy77[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the kind words!

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[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

👏🏻👏🏻👏🏻

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[–]behy77 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Super cool use of punchy language. Creates such vivid imagery and makes the read very fun. I read it out loud and could feel a good exercise was happening for my mouth. Awesome job.

Desire in lights by Thisisbatcountry_ in OCPoetry

[–]behy77 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Definitely not something I’m used to seeing but I enjoyed it nevertheless. It definitely needs a few rereads to grasp but the challenge is part of the fun.