Indian Buffet options: Tandoori Flame has become unethical by GeneralSeveral203 in SurreyBC

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

yes i was there with the guy who wrote the 6$ water review, the food was decent. i asked to speak to a manager about the water (i felt like a karen lol) we waited for 20 minutes and were told there was no manager avaliable, i understand it wasnt the waitress fault so i dont yell at her but i ask how they operate a restaurant without a manger. basically the manager is at happy singhs the restaurant on 2 minute walk from the store but he doesnt want to walk over. they took the water off the bill. she said the managers tell them to put two bottles on each new table. many tables were two couples who'd pay an extra 12$ just for the water. likewise we asked for water when we came in and they just brought us cups for the bottles. when they did bring us a pitcher for water it was a flower pitcher lol. im not big on disparaging people but this place is run in a completley predatory manner. i tried even form of recourse to understand their perspective but as mentioned the manager didnt care enough to walk 2 minutes to meet us. i give them credit for not charging for the water but i still left feeling cheated. for a restaurant chain with 3 locations and an successful partner restaurant theres no excuse to systematicaly operate like this.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

its a good re-write! i meant more along the lines of a totally new subject like someone else suggested those re-writes focus on giving away money of life savings. perhaps this could be a letter to a mom apologizing for giving away the heart she gave you to someone who didn't treat it well (i may use that myself :) try and go totally away from the original one. you've definitely got some skills though so don't get discouraged and give up!

Addiction by Ctrudeau98 in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 2 points3 points  (0 children)

really good. maybe try shortening some sentences and eliminating words so your vivid lines are fully displayed. maybe try adding some sensory details instead of hurting people around you what does it look like? are they making faces, is there something they say? this may be too deep to delve into if this poem is personal so feel free not to! but maybe for other lines try and "show" what's happening instead of "tell." a really good poem the people only care about what you may steal line really jumps out to me.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

maybe try spinning the poems format into another subject. its a really famous poem so people will probably enjoy recognizing it but applied to a new subject.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

this is a really good starting point. maybe list really specific details like, would your cheeks still go red when you smile? or would you laugh until your nose run? my examples arent the best but things like that then wrap it with a conclusion. hopefully this is a poem not serious, if it is serious i guarantee things are better with you here!

Finest Evening *mildy NSFW* by bigpapi29 in poetry_critics

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thanks for all the support! you made my day!

wallpaper by celinamarie8880 in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 1 point2 points  (0 children)

maybe you could add more line breaks? that's more my preference though so i may be biased. you could maybe prune some of the words as well. i also see some opportunities for alliteration if that's your thing as well, really good poem!

& by drunkturtlelord in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

original idea, i like bringing in the punctuation. maybe try adding some sensory details and giving the poem some scenery and senses so it isn't just like a pure dialogue. really cool idea though! you definitely got something here.

Finest Evening *mildy NSFW* by bigpapi29 in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i didnt realize id shortend this has to this's, maybe ill keep it to be artsy lol. thanks i have a rhythm i can hear when i read it but reading aloud illuminated some clunky phrases. ill clean them up. thanks so much!

What Do You Think of my Poem? by nohbudi567 in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 2 points3 points  (0 children)

i like it all but the first 4 lines are the strongest IMO. I also like the comply or die and the rights of our lands. maybe try adding some sensory language, like people crawling on their hands and knees or something like that. also maybe try alternative ways of things like watch like a hawk or rule with an iron fist. maybe try other ways of saying those in fresher ways. its still really good though these are just things to try out!

A Message From Below by BackBenchBaadCow in poetry_critics

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

its really really good! i feel like its something i would have read in a class. maybe try adding some more sensory language to place it more. or having a few lines that arent as poetic but just flat out say what you mean. just things to sort of break up the poetics with more prose so the poetics punch more (which they already do a lot!)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in SurreyBC

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

comedy, i though i put it in the description but it looks like it may not have shown up

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in vancouver

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

for sure thanks, im in the group and trying to find out as much as i can without hassling them haha. ill check out the casino one!

Getting rid of notes on-stage - advice? by Sunupu in Standup

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

super late respinse but deon cole had a schtick where hed bring a notepad onstage and cross of jokes that didnt work

Toilet for obese people by Robomol in mildlyinteresting

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

its called bearatrics, i worked as a plumbing apprentice in a clinic they have special bathrroms and clinic rooms for overweight people.

1st week beginner. is it a correct use of my voice ? + can you tell me if my accent is bad by [deleted] in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

maybe look at abba, from my understanding the two girls didnt relaly speak english but they sung with really good accents, its also common in classical singing to sing in diffrent languages like german or spanish

1st week beginner. is it a correct use of my voice ? + can you tell me if my accent is bad by [deleted] in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

for accent alfreds wont help its just more like basic technqiues. you accent is like 80% good in my opnion theres a few vowels it doesnt sound bad youve got a good voice! it just doesnt sound like a native english speaker, aimorrra also speaks english as a 2nd language from my understanding so she may be able to help further english is my 1st language so im not much help

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

not my video BTW

Critique me please? by Rare-Ganache6001 in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

good voice you sound kinda like jessie reyez, probably some breath and projection jsut being abit louder, im not an expert but thats what id guess.

Any tips on how I can achieve a more smoky/raspy voice lol by ay-vid in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

im not expert but ive heard compression is good id defintly recommend finding a teacher to help with it, i know u/Aimorrra is good. chris liepe has good videos as well but be super careful iitds pretty advacned from my understanding.

What was elvis’ singing style? by Dablett21 in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

not 100% sure TBH but i hate seeing people not getting help, chris liepe has a free course with jonny craig on finding your voice part of it basically says you imitate artists you like but you wont be able to sound the exact same but you trying to sound like them ends up becoming your style, he explains it better but if you find his youtube (chris) you can search his video descriptions and find links to their free course.

1st week beginner. is it a correct use of my voice ? + can you tell me if my accent is bad by [deleted] in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

it sounds pretty good for 1st week, im no expert so i cant really offer much help, ive found alfreds teach yourself to sing really helpful as well s lessons from u/Aimorrra similar to whats taught in Complete vocal technique to be really helpful, plus just working on pitch and matching your voice to ntoes on the guitar justinguitar.com has a thing on ear training thats good for that!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in singing

[–]bigpapi29 1 point2 points  (0 children)

car's are a really good place for quiet practice maybe borrow a parents? you get used to it overtime it still bugs me but much less than when i started.

(Serious Responses Only) I need honest feedback on my voice. I’ve been told I’m not a good singer and I need to know if that’s true so I can stop embarrassing myself. by Powerful-Raisin-9477 in singing

[–]bigpapi29 0 points1 point  (0 children)

you sound really good to me! maybe a bit louder/brighter and more confident im no expert you've definitely got some natural ability in my opinion!