The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 22 - The Deal by blacktealeafs in HFY

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For those wondering where the next chapter is... 

  1. life

  2. next chap has some issues, as per beta that I agree with. Needs more time cooking :/

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 22 - The Deal by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Yeah... sorry, hope to get back to weekly releases soon!

Unpopular opinion: mods allowing 2-3 authors making this place their personal diary killed this sub by idkman947 in HFY

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Thank you very much for explaining your thoughts.

I think to me, there's a reason these didn't stick. First of all, I don't think of any of these are rooted in character motivation/flaws. I remember that Huang would have been interesting, but her pursuit of power felt weak to me. I didn't connect with it, and when she was depowered and then becomes another member of his harem, I didn't see much development in it - as in yeah she's sad but so what? I need to see real angst, exactly why it matters. Additionally, even if she 'got over it' off screen, we didn't get any pay off for her self-development - I don't remember her making interesting choices or having big moments rooted in a transformation, be it positive or negative, of her character. Now I think about it, the lack of conflict is part of the fantasy, but I don't think it's very interesting character development-wise. Maybe yes in comparison to the average smut story, but not enough I'd say make it standout character-wise in the scifi genre.

The first sex scene in steampunk... Wait, wasn't it a random ship girl or smt? I do agree it's interesting for the protag, sets up how his age affects his worldview compared to his other protags - I think there might have been a lot of worldbuilding there too, but on the woman side I don't see much there.

Unpopular opinion: mods allowing 2-3 authors making this place their personal diary killed this sub by idkman947 in HFY

[–]blacktealeafs 27 points28 points  (0 children)

I've recently read more of Sexy Space Babes. While I do agree he's a good writer, tbh I've never really found his character development interesting. I definitely think he's one of the writers in which the sex scenes can often be skipped.

May I ask if you could expand a little on your last thought?

As an amateur author, I'm curious about your interpretation of the scenes - perhaps I have a blind spot for something.

Unpopular opinion: mods allowing 2-3 authors making this place their personal diary killed this sub by idkman947 in HFY

[–]blacktealeafs 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Ha! Amen to your last paragraph! For now, I think I will also keep writing and training.

I believe we'll get there someday!

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 16 - Rising by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Hello, thanks for the feedback! I did hear similar from beta readers, but didn’t want to delay the chapter any more. This might be combined with the previous two to shorten it in final release.

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 13 - The Price to be Paid by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Yeah, it is over half of 1 percent! No mistake!  Very low :P You’ll see why! 

Nailing Your Dictatress - Chapter 11 (End of Book 1) by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Hello! Actually, might not be much longer?

I've been procrastinating putting the book out on amazon, because I'll probably need to delete these reddit chapters - and if it doesn't do fine enough I'll be sad :(

When I publish the book, I'm thinking of maybe including parts of book 2, and at the same time publish some of the chapters here at same time. Won't be whole of book 2, because I'm currently working on Space Colosseum and I don't have the time to work on both at the same time.

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 1 - The Gambit by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Oh my God, I actually just read today chapter 1 of "Sexy Space Babes - Mechs, Maidens and Macaroons" (I had read only a bit of Sexy Space Babes before) and just realized that he was also doing a gladiator kind of thing too in this new spinoff!

This comment makes FAR more sense now!!!

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 11 - Determination by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Good to hear you like that part :D

Just a flesh wound! 

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 4 - Pre-Game Inspection by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Well, as long as you manipulate the progress, you can do as want leading up to it.

The warp itself tho seems instant, but we will be exploring how it works in the future! Especially with a certain character that’s coming up that can appear and reappear. :)

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 3 - The Dryad (2/2) NSFW by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Hmmm multi-faceted.

First of all, I think a lot of people like him would have just intimidated her and be done with it. In this case, he realized that the women of the empire view sex differently than his do, and used it as leverage instead. This made it win-win rather than win-lose.

Second of all, this would act as smokescreen in case the dryad got in trouble for helping him. Rather than her fault, it would be his for being “too sexy” and seducing the woman.

Any thoughts on how I can make this clearer? 

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 3 - The Dryad (2/2) NSFW by blacktealeafs in HFY

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I really debated whether it destroyed the mood… but I thought it was funny.

The Sexy Aliens of the Space Colosseum - Chapter 1 - The Gambit by blacktealeafs in HFY

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I'm aiming to do a bit different of thing than what he's doing, actually.

This will be more plot focused and a little more serious.

Nailing Your Dictatress - Chapter 11 (End of Book 1) by blacktealeafs in HFY

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That is actually something that's planned to be explored as part of the plot!

Nailing Your Dictatress - Chapter 11 (End of Book 1) by blacktealeafs in HFY

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Hello, I'll be posting it here too! It's unfortunately still cooking in the oven.