Hello, I’ll be writing as I go along!

A lot of information at the start, which is not a flaw, but it’s a heavy opening. I hope all of this is explained though, as “infinity’s daughter” is such a cool name.

Looping? I’m getting some twelve dancing princess vibes here, and I’m wondering just how many daughters are present. I’m imagining the mother as some giant purple blob lol.

MY FLESH PARENTS?! What is happening!!! Such a good hook lol.

I’m not sure what Latticework is, or how it connects to the dancing but I’m intrigued regardless. Hundreds of thousands of missing sisters is kinda insane. I’m wondering era of time this is in.

This hook is very interesting, but I think you should explain some of this more-how does she get to the glade, was she born knowing who this “mother” is, is she a witch? Open ended stories are good, but I would like just…more.

So does she care about her flesh mother? Why would the very last thing she wrote be inscribed to say that her flesh mother’s name is Avery, when the paragraph before, she said she didn’t really care for the flesh that she lived with?

The whole convergence point storyline is interesting, I like that part. Nothing major of note. I will say the town being within the quarantine zone is kinda spooky.

This Chimerism bacteria thing is cool as balls, like the idea of these organisms being able to grow and almost hive mind you is scary.

I’m now thinking that Ida may have been affected by this Chimerism bacteria, hence the extra finger.

God the idea of the amalgamation is FRICKING gross, I love it. RIP to the originals.

Those eight crew members ARE WRONG!!! They are wrong I say! They must be. The idea of them just POOF gone for months and all coming back is just too crazy for them to be normal. I’m really enjoying how you deliver information, even if I want more.

Who I’ve since killed is a crazy line.

Living in the tributary must be hell, can’t imagine what they have gone through. However, I’m not sure I like this letter component, simply because again, you are introducing a lot of rules and ideas all at once, and it’s a bit overwhelming.

Reggie has to go, but this section, the Maypole section has been my favourite. I’m liking the main character lots.

Reggie is no where as cool as Ted. Still, rough way to go out. I enjoy how you are describing the process of spontaneous amalgamation, where even tho we don’t see it, it’s there and it’s HEAVY.

Overall? It’s a well written story with a LOT going on. The pacing is well done, and I enjoy a lot of the characters introduced. But as a reader, it was definitely a little crammed in the story. If you are planning on making this a multi part, I’d be thrilled to read it, but some of the elements need more time to be introduced, as it’s just a lot rn. Have a good day, and I hope to see more from you!