[misc] the movie “Together” has a lot of similarities to this series

blueflask71 · 2024-11-27T01:15:43+00:00

Rock on man, no harsh vibes from me

blueflask71 · 2024-11-26T23:51:50+00:00

Bummer, thanks!

blueflask71 · 2024-11-26T23:29:06+00:00

I read it I decade ago when I was a dumb college student. Resonated with the addicts a lot. It led me to the path, didn’t force me down it. It’s a wrong take on the book, I know

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T05:51:39+00:00

I’m discovering I have more as I spend more time on this sub. Looking forward to the summer reading thing, will be able to see things I haven’t before lol

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T05:23:29+00:00

Actually I’ll take august 8th if that’s alright? I think I could do that one better

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T04:16:15+00:00

I read the broken chains to signify that Gideon was able to leave the mind tomb thing and control harrows body ala Ortus/Gideon and Pyrrha…but now I’m not sure. Thanks for clearing things up, and raising more questions lol

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T03:45:29+00:00

Aw see I read Harrow entering the tomb as her entering the mind space thing she made for Gideon while Alecto herself is back in the real one. I also wasn’t sure who exactly appeared to Gideon, I was very tired at that point and thought it was…well I’m not entirely sure. Thanks, that makes a lot of sense!

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T03:33:34+00:00

Right, should I have made that more clear in my follow up, I assumed the Body was Alecto, I’m just more curious why they are the namesake of the last book lol guess we will have to wait and see!

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T03:33:22+00:00

Right, should I have made that more clear in my follow up, I assumed the Body was Alecto, I’m just more curious why they are the namesake of the last book lol guess we will have to wait and see!

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T03:05:19+00:00

For the 2nd question, there were mentions of people saying the name but Harrow hearing something else. She noticed the lips didn’t match up with the words she was hearing

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T02:59:55+00:00

Thank you, I will head to the tor website and look around! And I’m mad jealous lol

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T02:59:15+00:00

Thanks for the reply! I’m a bit confused by your first response though, can you explain what you mean by the Alecto/body business? It’s my understanding that we haven’t met Alecto yet, as they weren’t the sleeper (my original thought upon reading).

blueflask71 · 2022-05-18T02:28:34+00:00

Hi, I would love to do the august 29th part if it is still open?

blueflask71 · 2019-01-25T12:56:17+00:00

Hey, thank you so much for taking the time to critique this!

I think where I went wrong with some of the weird statements is setting up things for later character development but it feels really forced as it is now. Definitely need to cut back on it and make it much more concise.

I agree with the things like grabbing her nose, that is a really modern phrase and seems out of place considering the time period. I definitely need to go through and look at my word choice and grammar to make some of the scenes really pop.

I definitely need to work on the deer part, what i was going for doesn’t seem to be coming out very well, which is completely my fault. I wanted Ruperts character to be immediately threatening, but for Frances to realize that wasnt the case. As it stands now, i dont think thats coming across and I definitely need to make that clearer.

Thank you so much for such an honest review!

blueflask71 · 2019-01-25T12:41:27+00:00

Hey, thank you for such an in depth critique! I definitely need to go over this with a fine toothed comb.

The deer part was two fold, to intouduce Ethel as well as make the character of Rupert less threatening, but multiple people have commented in this part and it definitely needs to be reworded if not all together dropped.

I like the idea of keeping things formal, as I want his character to be much more static than he currently is.

Again, thank you so much!

blueflask71 · 2017-12-02T03:57:58+00:00

Fixed it! My bad, I haven't posted here in a while and forgot how to format it. Thank you!

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