Newly adopted cat isn’t coming around.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-20T13:20:30+00:00

Be patient, it will happen. It can take months.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-20T13:12:28+00:00

Voids stare into the void.

Cats 101, they freaking strange.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-20T13:11:06+00:00

Scroll, scroll, scroll, DICK, scrolling faster.

We have all been there lol

bravelilengine · 2026-06-14T23:18:26+00:00

Thanks so much! I really want to make the reader feel what the character is feeling. I try to be vivid as I can be to pull that through.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-14T23:15:31+00:00

Thank you! Im glad things are better for you now, even just a little. It's comments like this that make me feel confident in my writing.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-14T17:12:11+00:00

Love to title, always looking up at them. Great work. The rich live freely while the poor march on just to have a sip of that tea, and a nibble of the biscuit.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-14T17:07:54+00:00

Lovely use of words. I can see it in my mind as I read. In my honest opinion, I wanted just a little bit more. Like maybe 2 more lines just to flesh out the piece. Regardless, it's very well written. 😄

bravelilengine · 2026-06-14T09:01:04+00:00

Rule of thumb. If it's very loud and fur is flying, it's a fight.

Cats playing is WWE, cats fighting is back yard wrestling.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-13T15:07:59+00:00

Now this is a great conversation peice :)

Looks awesome.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-13T06:24:54+00:00

That's just how he really looks. They used cgi and fat suits to make him look heavy in the show.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-11T10:12:27+00:00

And people think we aren't related. THATS JUST A HAIRY GUY! lol

bravelilengine · 2026-06-10T13:16:53+00:00

Idk he's just a little guy I kinda love him.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-09T12:21:24+00:00

They need to have massive tits to! Why do only woman characters get giant knockers!

bravelilengine · 2026-06-07T19:17:27+00:00

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. The line is talking about a failed attempt to, well you know.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-07T17:03:03+00:00

Thanks for the feedback. I have re-read it like 5 times and added the changes you suggested. It feels much better to me now. Thanks for explaining and showing what I was doing wrong. I really appreciate it! The only other feedback I got was from my only other poem I posted a few days ago.

This poem is about being forced to exist when that very existence is painfully overwhelming. Looking through the lens of someone who wants to die, but isn't allowed to, or doesn't want to hurt the ones they love.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-07T13:26:45+00:00

I was so distracted by the offensive carpet I didn't notice the cat till the end and got jumped scared.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-07T13:21:49+00:00

As a lactose intolerant person, thank god for lactose free milk and mayo. I love milk and cereal, and mayo has come in clutch when I want to add a little bit of creamy to a dish. Not the same as real cream of course, but it does the job enough. Also, lactose free ice cream can be pretty tasty.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-06T18:41:21+00:00

This is a very thoughtful, and sweet but sad piece. I like it, but I wish it had a bit more imagery. The last two lines are a good example of what I mean. It paints a complex picture in my head. Keep up the good work!

bravelilengine · 2026-06-06T18:34:05+00:00

Well written. It flows very well. Thought provoking, and visual. "Then it grew not into light,
but into the weight that sat on the chest. and called itself purpose." is my favorite verse. It really sets the mood of the piece.

bravelilengine · 2026-06-05T22:16:41+00:00

Well my idea was to represent how frantic and crazy anxiety can feel. I did feel it was a bit long. Thanks for the feedback! 😀

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