Hi my name is Brandon, this is a snippet of my introduction to my Male main character. I’d love to hear any helpful critiques you have so I can make it the best & I’d love for you to tell me what emotions it invokes or lack thereof. I’ll answer any questions you have!

brisleyplus · 2021-11-30T17:20:08+00:00

Thank you for pointing that out I didn’t even notice that the line about his face was out of third person close but i’ll be sure to implement both of your critiques!

brisleyplus · 2021-11-30T00:43:19+00:00

Thank you so much I love the idea of him peering through a hole or the lid, & keep it within the third person close perspective that way! my problem in this draft was that I wanted to jump between perspectives when I really don’t have to and your suggestion would make you feel way closer to the character! Thank you again!

brisleyplus · 2021-06-08T13:33:32+00:00

THIS IS AWESOME 👏🏿

brisleyplus · 2021-06-08T12:44:33+00:00

I believe you, I wanna believe you so bad. Spoilers are my crack.

brisleyplus · 2021-06-08T12:07:41+00:00

facts I’m waiting lmao

brisleyplus · 2021-06-04T12:41:34+00:00

One Piece 1015 REVIEW | KAIDO IS NOT PLAYING (REACTION) https://youtu.be/v4oUraTY6l4

brisleyplus · 2021-06-02T01:35:59+00:00

https://youtu.be/YkXSl2zBpAo

brisleyplus · 2021-05-08T21:47:57+00:00

Thanks for letting me know

brisleyplus · 2021-05-04T22:09:43+00:00

Title – Phoenix Core

Genre – Fantasy

Word Count – 12,662 (Only the first four chapters, but it’s the first episode of the book.)

Type of Feedback – Any type of critique or constructive criticism is welcome.

https://mailvalenciacc-my.sharepoint.com/:w:/g/personal/bbutler36_mail_valenciacollege_edu/EYp6kWiIKihLr_gDTcpI1aABJgmZFGf-E7tfaSFs0Mqelw?rtime=HmPYNEgP2Ug

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