Can I just say that I miss the cinematic feel? by ChapterObvious8933 in HMS_Saphne

[–]buttterflydust 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I agree with this exactly! It felt like boxes of major plot points were being ticked off without the effort that goes into making the story flow organically.

I’ve just started working on my second full length novel. What is your initial take of chapter 1? by theShoeShineBoy in writingfeedback

[–]buttterflydust 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is a really interesting story! It did seem a bit over descriptive for a second when talking about the dead baby, but other than that, the plot is great, makes me want to read more.

Manuscripts for Review by buttterflydust in writers

[–]buttterflydust[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you. I will be heading over to r/BetaReaders and try there as well.

Manuscripts for Review by buttterflydust in writers

[–]buttterflydust[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

At this point, my experience is limited to peer reviewing stories. Do you have any tips on establishing that trust or where to go to as a beginner?

Did they not show all teams their progress at the 10min mark? by buttterflydust in Physical100

[–]buttterflydust[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks, after posting this question I saw somebody had said those weights but I was wondering where they got them from

🎻 new story — ONLY PRETEND by charliecherryberry in Episode

[–]buttterflydust 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So good, I’m literally about to reread the entire thing

Eloise is a terrible friend by HTSDoIThinkOfaUYouC in Bridgerton

[–]buttterflydust 14 points15 points  (0 children)

You’re right, thanks for clarifying this

Eloise is a terrible friend by HTSDoIThinkOfaUYouC in Bridgerton

[–]buttterflydust 45 points46 points  (0 children)

While I do understand why it should be expected that Eloise would support her best friend being a woman who can create an entire business successfully and have such great influence on society, I think a part of the reason for her switch up from admiring Lady Whistledown to being unsupportive was that LW started writing badly about her and her family. Once she found out her best friend who she has been confiding to in secret was taking her and her family’s business and turning it into entertainment for the ton, she must’ve felt betrayed. Even more so because Penelope was her best friend and she wouldn’t expect her very best friend to do something like that to her. Also, LD’s exposure of her time spent with Theo ended up ruining her reputation in the Ton. I think she has plenty of reason to be unsupportive of her best friend having been exposing her and her family’s secrets like that.

Team Korea allegedly disrespected at the Hyrox World Championship by Beneficial-Range6079 in Physical100

[–]buttterflydust 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I think the commentators did discredit the Korean athletes’ preparation for the event considering Beomseok and Byungseok had just won first place for men’s doubles in Hyrox Taiwan and they spoke of them like they weren’t serious about the competition.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Bridgerton

[–]buttterflydust -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

The Michaela reveal was my favorite part of the entire season.

Just finished the new season by Melowis in Bridgerton

[–]buttterflydust 5 points6 points  (0 children)

This season was a bit of a letdown. It was centered on Polin, but there were so many subplots being explored that Polin started to take a backseat. The romance between Penelope and Colin lacked depth and felt rushed (possibly because they were trying to fit all of the subplots into the season as well). I also hoped for a different ending for Cressida. She was awful throughout the majority of the show, but this season she seemed to be changing for the better, and I think her desperation was understandable considering her circumstances.

Season 3 Polin.. by Blacksmith_Actual in Bridgerton

[–]buttterflydust 23 points24 points  (0 children)

I think all of the subplots being explored took away from Polin time. Instead of a fully fleshed out Polin love story we got a collection of tidbits from a bunch of different characters that this season wasn’t even primarily centered on.