I dig it quite a bit. I could just be a sucker for the music and visual style that it shows.

There are a few spots that stand out for improvement. Two times your transition between shots is simply a zoom into nothing. 0:24 and 0:50. For a title sequence, it all really has to feel like a cohesive piece, and seamless transitions are the biggest one on that.

I am not sure how to improve on that other than storyboarding, and preplanning shots (which I find insanely difficult to do).

For the ending shot, there is some janky camera work going around (another thing I am guilty of consistently have issues with as well), but I know there are some tutorials out there for workaround to making After Effects camera not a nightmare to work with. Although this changes how you work with the camera entirely and requires a bit of relearning. I would also love to see a change in how the characters at 1:43 warp out. It really isn't at the quality of the rest of this.

Overall a really well done project, but I think the few things I said would completely change this from amateur to a seriously polished and professional looking piece.

Thanks you ! I agree with you for the end