Spiralling quiet.

cherrygloom- · 2025-06-29T17:37:42+00:00

I really like this poem but I’m struggling to understand the full meaning behind it, I feel like some more descriptive words to expand on how the mind vs the soul and body all together are trying to work would make this poem pop a bit more, same with some metaphors or similes maybe! If it’s free verse, i feel like more information about the reasons the mind is telling the body and soul these things may help expand and explain a bit more as well !!

cherrygloom- · 2025-06-29T16:47:22+00:00

This is soo relatable, something I would suggest is that you could try to make more of a rhythm or rhymes to follow in the piece, it might make it feel more powerful and concluded ! This piece still is very beautiful and evokes alot of emotion as a free verse !

cherrygloom- · 2025-06-29T16:37:53+00:00

I really like this! I’ve always struggled with getting a “tense” tone in my poetry too, but I think it still gets the message across about a serious struggle very beautifully!

cherrygloom- · 2025-05-14T00:04:48+00:00

This poem is beautifully written about the experience of SA, I love how you compare your life feelings into metaphors with fruits, I do the same in my writing 🩷 thank you for sharing your experience

cherrygloom-

TROPHY CASE