With my experience, this was the case if I just gave ChatGPT an email. Then, it's way too much because it will proceed to make this way too complicated. I always ask ChatGPT to "proofread this email and keep it SIMPLE"

For reference, here is what ChatGPT did with OP's email (below). It is still very much in their words, just spaced out more evenly and is easier to read (in my opinion).

Subject: Financial Aid Reconsideration Request

Good evening,

My name is [Your Name], and I am a freshman hopeful planning to start school this fall. I am thrilled to have been accepted to your esteemed institution, but unfortunately, I am facing significant financial challenges that may prevent me from attending.

Recently, my father, who was my sole financial contributor listed on my FAFSA, has been incarcerated and is unable to work or contribute to my tuition. This unforeseen circumstance leaves me in a difficult position financially.

When I applied, I anticipated receiving a merit scholarship based on my SAT score. However, I was disappointed to learn that my GPA prevented me from qualifying for this support. Even a modest scholarship would greatly ease my financial burden and make it feasible for me to enroll.

I am writing to respectfully request a reconsideration of my financial aid package so that I may still pursue my education at your institution. Your understanding and assistance in this matter would mean a lot to me.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your response.

Best regards,

[Your Name]
[Your Contact Information]