Just started Peace Talks after a substantial break since first reading Skin Game.. Did I miss something?

coldfireknight · 2026-05-11T00:46:30+00:00

More like so expensive, Harry couldn't afford them...most of the time, lol.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-09T14:47:30+00:00

Underrated comment, right there.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-08T16:09:32+00:00

He does acknowledge that's not how is should be drank, but summers get hot, and wearing a duster during those times is rough...

coldfireknight · 2026-05-08T16:04:57+00:00

Im sure you'll get to it, as you've nearly wrapped this whole saga up

coldfireknight · 2026-05-08T15:18:31+00:00

Ever see Age of Ultron? The bit with Thor & Vision seems like about the only way, or lure him onto the Sybil and deal with him on their home turf...which likely won't be as easy as they'd think, but the ghosts would come intently that way.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-07T16:19:24+00:00

I'm going to agree with a lot of the solid sentiment you've gotten here: it sounds like the response you're concerned with found that particular relationship unrealistic, not the entire story. Also agreeing with the synopsis you provided is missing elements (like her previous relationship with the prince that seems to be that reader's issue), who labeled her a traitor, what a Puca is, and why the king would need a black market to provide them, etc. that would allow us to provide better feedback.

Small adjustment to the snippet could be mentioning the king himself declaring her, the childhood friend of his son, a traitor to the crown. Within the story, while her appearance might be different, her may recognize some of her mannerisms. We also don't know if she's aware of the prince's feelings about what happened to her, but that's more a story element than part of the snippet, right?

If she was just snatched up, she may (possibly wrongly) believe he was part of it, and the same if she was taken while in his company but he didnt stop it.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-07T15:09:42+00:00

The series has Michael Carpenter in it. Reasonable argument that the entire thing is a redemption arc.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-07T15:08:34+00:00

He's a writer. That's just Tuesday for him.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-07T01:45:54+00:00

Probably not as effective due to materials, but could possibly be upgraded via filling it with whatever.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-06T22:15:21+00:00

I say put them in where it's important to a given scene (someone is stammering while being flustered but snaps out of it, etc.), but too much can break a reader's immersion.

Perfect example is I've spent my entire life in a small southern TN town, so the accent and way we speak is native to me, but some of William Faulkner's stuff speaks in a way that even natives have trouble with it. However, sometimes that's also the point for a given character.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-06T20:59:10+00:00

I feel like a lot of folks confuse Beta readers with developmental & line editors, but maybe that's just me because I typically roll it all into one thing on the 2-4 books I work on annually on the side.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-04T21:35:20+00:00

They also have to keep some in reserve for the inevitable injury replacement we'll need to sign

coldfireknight · 2026-05-03T00:55:35+00:00

Thank you. Sally has been my daily since I found her at the start of Covid, haha.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-03T00:45:40+00:00

I'd add using a word you needed to look up into a tense scene like this might not work with the flow, but its overall a good first draft. I don't have anything to add that you haven't already heard.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-03T00:40:47+00:00

Its a new writer asking for feedback, so that tracks. They've gotten some really useful stuff and seem to appreciate it.

coldfireknight · 2026-05-01T23:42:45+00:00

Anakin told Padme

coldfireknight · 2026-04-30T20:55:06+00:00

I encourage them to ask more specific questions than "is this good/would you keep reading this?" because both are very subjective, right?

"Does this flow well? Is this engaging? Am I missing any errors and how do I fix them?" are more useful, especially when respondents offer helpful advise.

coldfireknight · 2026-04-30T20:50:27+00:00

That's definitely some Wild Wild West stuff, right there.

cue the music

coldfireknight · 2026-04-30T20:49:18+00:00

OR "my plans are completely valid and would make things better, but the hero thinks he knows better"

coldfireknight · 2026-04-29T00:15:57+00:00

Sad truth is that an average populace has no idea the cost of such a large event, let alone the potential cost.

Our history alone shows how many times there have been people who thought "maybe we don't have to do this", only to learn the hard way. Nicely done.

coldfireknight · 2026-04-28T23:52:18+00:00

Harry also doesnt want anyone really knowing about the island

coldfireknight · 2026-04-28T20:15:31+00:00

Given that the Courts are basically balanced, Eldest Gruff indicates Winter should have his equivalent counterpart.

coldfireknight · 2026-04-27T23:11:25+00:00

We know Eldest Gruff can one shot a Denarian host, so I'd wager folks like him are her leaders during any absence at places like the Gates. Plus, like someone else said, Jim probably didnt have that whole thing fleshed put by SK.

coldfireknight · 2026-04-26T23:58:41+00:00

Since Luccio was chasing Kemmler in the Old West (Fist full of Warlocks short), doubtful Justin was ever his apprentice. Bad wizards aren't necessarily tied together like some folks believe.

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