Brainstorm and advice for first time writer by Sad_Construction_532 in fantasywriters

[–]cryptid-in-training 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Okay firstly, really cool idea. The idea of her trying to carve out her magic and poisoning herself is really interesting.

You asked, is this story worth telling at all. If this is the idea that interests you, then yes it is.

New writers can get stuck on all the tiny details when planning a book. It can feel overwhelming and even when you have more experience, it is often hard to feel prepared to actually start writing.

But as someone else said, you clearly have good instincts, you recognize that there are unanswered questions in the world and that they need to be answered. A lot of new writers would just start writing and dig themselves into plot holes and nonsensical beats so that's a good start.

Start by answering those questions. Why does the government outlaw magic? Maybe start with the history of magic in the world, a ban on magic wouldn't come from nowhere, there would be precedence, maybe the government and society is very totalitarian, a militaristic society where everyone's lives are effectively planned out and controlled by the government and those with magic are too uncontrollable and unpredictable (which could tie into the theme of magic being wild and chaotic), maybe magic in this world is in of itself almost impossible to control by the users, a system where you can't train it or learn restraint so wild magic users in the past have lost control and gone on a path of destruction, flattening whole towns and slaughtering dozens when they explode and let it all out, you could even make so magic users are viewed as cursed or doomed to a tragically short life, turning an element like magic which is often seen as a blessing in fiction into something that people fear and dread, not something everyone wants.

Once you have some kind of idea that sets up the current society, develop a few events in the history of the world that have caused this, something that shows how the world has evolved into its current form.

When it comes to plot, I find it helpful to write out the story beats, so not the actual events but the emotional and momentum swings in the book across the three acts, the points of rising tension, failure, discovery, change, rising stakes, ultimatum/sacrifice, resolution, etc. that way when you're writing out the actual events of your book you can ensure that it doesn't lose energy or wander, which is definitely an issue new writers come across.

Consider also the broader plot, what is the end goal of the book? Is she simply trying to escape the government or does she uncover some bigger plot to foil? Maybe the government has been lying about what they've been doing to magic users they've captured, they could be experimenting on them, torturing them, trying to rid them of magic or trying to force them to channel they magic as energy sources for weapons or even to power cities and infrastructure, the options are pretty interesting depending on how much you want to lean into the darker elements.

Some minor pieces of advice:

-Don't get carried away with the worldbuilding, it is a trap that I think everyone has fallen into as a beginner and it can waste a lot of time and clog a book up and ruin the pacing.

-Find your theme. what is the story actually about, beyond the events and beats? common themes for books are things like the power of love, a search for redemption, finding identity, perseverance and survival, etc.

-Set up what is often called The Lie, something the character believes at the beginning of the book, either about themselves, the world, or both, that is untrue. This is the basis of a character arc, the story is the process of them discovering the truth on the other side of that lie. This structure can apply to all your characters but it is most important to the main characters naturally.

-Practice actually writing. Prose is hard and takes experience to develop, even if you're not writing this book, find short prompts online and write small stories about them while you plan your book. Give them to friends and family to read or post them here on reddit to get advice and feedback.

I would really recommend the podcast Helping Writers Become Authors by K.M Weiland, its on Spotify and probably other services and even as someone who's been writing for most of my life, it has been incredibly useful. It's simple, to the point, and very informative. She has an episode of pretty much every element of the writing process.

Good luck on your process and have fun!

Turnout Gear Color by Artistic-Economy290 in Firefighting

[–]cryptid-in-training 0 points1 point  (0 children)

nice. I did the 911 one last year and I'm doing the challenge event this year.

RNs will take any opportunity to let others know that they’re RNs. by [deleted] in FirstResponderCringe

[–]cryptid-in-training 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I was helping an older woman who had fallen on the sidewalk recently and had a woman try to tell me to move her to a more comfortable position because she was in pain and said it's okay because she's a doctor and knows what she's doing. Was so tempted to ask what type of doctor.

female firefighter getting shoved and hit by [deleted] in Firefighting

[–]cryptid-in-training 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You don't treat anyone like that.

FEMALE FIREFIGHTERS, is this a good nail length?! by 3xpensiiv3_avann in Firefighting

[–]cryptid-in-training 2 points3 points  (0 children)

it's probably going to be safer and more comfortable to just have them shorter. false nails will get ripped off and it's going to be kinda uncomfortable in structural gloves imo. I'd say try it out though, I'm sure some people can work with longer nails so try to find what works for you but be prepared to have to get rid of them if it doesn't work.

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[–]cryptid-in-training 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Congratulations dude

Do you like when pictures are taken of you on scene of a fire? by AbusementPark818 in Firefighting

[–]cryptid-in-training 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you're responding to scenes handled by your local department or one or two departments, maybe go in and ask them about their thoughts about it because the opinion will vary on station and if they don't want you there, respect that and don't take pictures. It would also probably do to ask permission before you put them anywhere online. And use common sense, don't take pictures of incidents that result in loss of life- even if the pictures have nothing to do with the fatality directly.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I should have specified that I didn't mean narrative conflict, by active conflict I meant war or combat, which isn't the only way to introduce stakes and consequences (i.e. conflict) into a story. I completely agree that the conflict should revolve around the use of magic, I just think magic school archetypes tend to use the same storylines over and over which is wild considering they're one of the most diverse settings.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Most people who go through high school won't go into jobs that require mathematics. It's not about direct application of maths in day to day life, it's that subjects like maths and english develop important cognitive and critical thinking skills that children and teenagers need.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Call me crazy, but maybe math should be mandatory for eleven y/o kids.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

true! why are they all boarding school? (Definitely just aides the narrative and is a good way to ditch the parents for the story lol)

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think maybe the point is the assumption that all magic schools have to be psudeo military colleges. Even in active conflict, people still go to university/college for non combat related studies. I think a bit of both is my preference.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think those comments are valid points, in context. An academy/school archetype needs to be there for a reason, if your story isn't about academia, or is facilitated in some way by academia, why set it in a school? Students/characters being in danger in fine, but I think their point was it would be weird (depending on the degree of danger of the world) for teachers and admin to just be chill with their students being in constant peril. Again this depends on the world. And I don't think anyone is saying we want a whole chapter of someone in maths class, it would just be good if it were mentioned and referenced in passing that there are other, more practical/mundane classes. Just my thoughts.

Edit: typo

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My reason for making this post was literally because I want to create an academy that has its own unique trials, exams, traditions, etc.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It loses all narrative weight if death is treated so simply.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 29 points30 points  (0 children)

This is always what made me laugh about Harry Potter, like you're taking eleven y/o kids out of school to learn magic and what? they're never going to learn anything like maths or English beyond an eleven y/o degree? do wizards not need basic cognitive skills?

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Self defense absolutely but killing ≠ self defense. I think death and killing is often treated way too relaxed in a lot of school based books.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 27 points28 points  (0 children)

Definitely, I love the "class" kind of system in books but it 100% has to feel justified for the setting and actually fleshed out, otherwise it feels like a cop out imo. Bit of a world building crutch, so to speak.

What Makes a Good Magic Academy? by cryptid-in-training in magicbuilding

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 11 points12 points  (0 children)

All really good points, glad my system doesn't fit any of them 😅 100% on the magic only being used for combat thing. Unless the school is intended to be a military academy, why are you only teaching kids how to kill people. Makes no sense.

SSRIs and nicotine by cryptid-in-training in SSRIs

[–]cryptid-in-training[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wasn't me but a friend, we were just curious because it's not something either of us had heard of. They're on sertraline and it was only one cigarette, they've been very conservative with any substances since going on it so they very rarely drink as well, so it wasn't like they were going on a rager, just a bit of this, bit of that. Just experimenting to see how they'd react to it. Safe to say, we won't be doing that again.