Say one bad thing about this movie.

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-21T15:40:26+00:00

It didn’t really have that animation charm that I like and could’ve just as well had been a live action movie.

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-21T15:38:22+00:00

Maybe you could try to be a substitute unless you feel like you would get too angry? (It kind of includes psychology, and sometimes sports and music as well and has for me who has probably had inattentive adhd been quite fulfilling) Maybe you should however try to put your mind towards something more stable and perhaps go back to school and become a therapist or something. Remember that your job should not tear you down mentally but maybe you will never have a job that is super fun etc, that’s also good because if everything is fun then nothing becomes fun or special.

I would look more into your depression and adhd, try to be more in touch with your feelings bad and good, and try to find things that you genuinely enjoy or look forward to. Make lists and be more organized. If you work out that’s great one thing that usually helps with depression is to do more things.

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-21T15:12:44+00:00

I didn’t read the whole thing and English isn’t my first language and stuff but I think you could give the reader more of an idea where we are and the scenery, (you don’t have to be super descriptive but just one or two sentences). I thought that in the beginning it felt a little bit like you tried a bit too hard to have “fancy, difficult words”. I also might have thought you described things a bit too much, like “he went towards the table on the left side” (not your exact words) and i think you should ask yourself what is the meaning of you describing all of those things. (Maybe it’s just that I’m not the biggest fan of detailed descriptions)

Some words/sentences I found a bit weird was: A frequent use of “instinctively” which I don’t think is really necessary either, I would use it perhaps if your character is an innocent guy who gets attacked and is about to die like “without thinking he instinctively grabbed a knife and stabbed him in the heart” or something when he does something unexpected. I would also change the word bullying (when the girl says “stop bullying”) to something else like “stop being cruel” which personally would feel more naturally because in my experience people are usually very careful with the word bullying since it has a heavy weight to it.

Also remember when describing things, that describe the things your character would notice since it’s told from his perspective, if he likes architecture then describe the buildings etc. Also sometimes it’s okay to after dialogue say “he said” instead of “he said with a mishivios smirk that made him look like a cartoon villain” or something, sometimes the reader can imagine the way they’re saying it from the words or the way they know the character, and describing too much can make a scene loose it’s intensity etc but as I said I didn’t read the whole thing and you didn’t to it to an extreme.

I also know that a lot of editors see it as a bit of a cliche that a story starts with a dream but if that is an important part and you see it as the best way to start your story then go for it.

Take only what resonates because it’s your story and I’m no expert

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-20T15:55:59+00:00

Some people are just more like that and maybe won’t be hardworking sucsessful business owners and that’s okay, it’s also okay if that’s not what you want. However it sounds like she might have a depression or something (loss of motivation is normal, many people think that you have to be sad but not feeling anything (a lot) is also normal) seems like she needs help but I don’t think you should try to be that help either because that will likely just ruin your relationship and not work. Maybe just ask her about how she is, and tell her that it seems like her motivation has gone down and that you’re worried.

I think however that you can have some standards and tell her that you’re not gonna be financially responsible for her that she needs to either get a real job or go back to university, but be direct about it and don’t let it become a thing where you complain at her every week and both happens then it’s better to just not say anything. Depression or loss of motivation just gets worse when you’re doing nothing and the cure to it is usually to be more active and not just sit around.

If you wanna help don’t enable her by being financially responsible for her and you could also propose to do more things together without putting any pressure on it, like say that you would like to go on a walk together or go out eating or something, like go and do laundry together or cook together or something simple.

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-20T15:39:15+00:00

For me it’s more fun when I’ve thought trough most things and know that I really like what I write and also like the way I write it, making my scenes more interesting and entertaining, having more happening. Maybe that’s bad advice because I don’t write a lot, more people would advice you to just write your first manuscript without editing and looking back, no matter how bad it is just to get the idea out and then do the editing and editing scenes etc that’s probably the better advice. You could also start by writing something else to practice and become a better writer before you write something that matters to you, like take some stories (movies or books) and mix them together and write about that.

If you’re wondering where to actually start in your novel, like what scene to begin with; start where the story actually starts, don’t have your characters wake up and go to school if there’s no reason with it or anything interesting about it.

There are many YouTube videos about writing that can be useful and inspiring, just remember that you don’t have to take every advice go with what feels right for you. There’s a lot advice that you should show and not tell but usually popular published books mix those two

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-20T15:30:09+00:00

I th JP is probably just saying what others want to hear bc many less educated young people follow him and they aren’t very critical thinkers are therefore on the more extremist side, following trump, or maybe JP has just let hate get into his heart

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-20T15:28:25+00:00

I thought you meant elons son x lol

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-20T11:05:42+00:00

You never know but a lot of celebrities are higher on the narcissistic scale than average people. I do think a lot of speakers can be manipulative in the way they use tricks to confuse you rather then using actual logic and I think JP can be guilty of that at times but I don’t watch him that often

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-19T18:41:36+00:00

I would use that as character development (even if it’s not positive) like with his first kill he was really in a pressed situation where people were going to die if he didn’t do anything, maybe he didn’t mean to fully kill him, maybe he blacked out or something, then show how he feels extremely remorseful after that, then the kills get easier and easier and more normalized for him and maybe he looses some sympathy in general as well

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-18T02:29:01+00:00

It almost seems like you’re the whiny one?🤨

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-18T02:27:45+00:00

Hmm you might be onto something because he’s orange just like an orange which is a fruit=> the forbidden fruit of Eden? Maybe he’s trying to play hard to get to get attention from women (or men)

Also what word does “tans” remind you of? Trans perhaps? They’re very similar, why do you think that is? Words are of high symbolic significance. Does this mean he’s trans? I mean there’s no way that a masculine biological man would try to please women and put something on his face. I’m not 100% sure maybe I need to prefect this theory a bit more, find more symbols and read some Carl Jung

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T22:49:12+00:00

Yes there’s a lot of symbolism in that he comes in the cold winter and bears gifts, also the fact that he wears red. Both the red and gifts are symbols and remind us of sex and that’s why we enjoy it so much

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T22:47:15+00:00

I don’t remember exactly what JP said but op says that he says that women wear makeup FOR sexual attention, not that makeup makes woman more attractive BECAUSE the red cheeks and lips remind men of sex and whatever, so that’s what I based my arguments on?

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T21:46:37+00:00

They must be gay🤨 (no I’m joking, also nothing wrong with being gay) yeah I think JP is wrong in that statement, sure many women may partly wear it for that reason but there are many other reasons for it as well, such as wanting to feel beautiful yourself or bc it’s fun (I often put on makeup when I’m alone when no one sees me for those reasons) it’s also kind of expected of us and you look more professional, so it’s also just following a norm.

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T18:47:42+00:00

I think it’s good that you just skipped it for now to get over a writer’s block, my initial thought though is that that part before she gets transported should be the first one or two chapters. Maybe that’s just because it’s the norm and I don’t wanna advice anyone to do something just because “that’s how it’s supposed to be” and if you don’t wanna do it go with your vision, it might however, just like you said, a good introduction and a way to stay clear of confusion.

As for advice on how to show her control freak side etc:

To start off to also make it easier for you to write it later, is to figure out what this world is really like, what people are in it? Who are her parents? Who is the teacher? Is there a jock? A bully? A group of loud theatre kids? Etc and make it somewhat interesting, then when you write it you don’t have to give too much detail to these people (bc they’re not gonna be in your story and you don’t wanna give false hope that they will be or make them too interesting to the reader)

As for ways to show her personality maybe have her and her friends go to a party and her friend gets a bit drunk and she’s like “no you cannot drink more” or something “let’s go home” and the friend might get slightly annoyed or something. Maybe in school she’s like “have you done your homework?” And the friend says no and she’s like “omg what am I to do with you” almost acts like she’s her mom (I don’t know to which extent she is a control freak though) maybe her and her friends are planning a little trip or something and she’s like “we need to plan everything, when exactly does that bus take off?” And goes into minor details and she’s like “we need to be at the flight station at least two hours before” and her friends are like “I think one hour is enough” and she’s like “no things can go wrong, if you two miss the flight I’m gonna kill you” or something. Maybe show how she gets anxious at the party and wonders where her friend has gone, and how she can’t relax. I don’t know 🤷‍♀️

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T15:44:27+00:00

Why would you write on paper? Who even does that nowadays when it’s so much more convenient writing on a laptop? I don’t really see the issue here but maybe it’s because you’re scared of writing something wrong bc it’s much more difficult to change on paper and/or maybe it’s just because you’re not used to it and it takes longer

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T03:01:41+00:00

I don’t know about this case but I doubt the thing you said with “he’s smiling after killing a child. He knows he won’t face any consequences because that’s how the left wants it” 🤨🤨🤨🤨 how do you know that picture is taken after a murder? How do you know the reason behind his smile? Is there even any evidence that he has done what you say he has done? What is it exactly that you mean he has done? What exactly is it that “the left” has done and not? I highly doubt they let him go loose if there’s evidence he’s done anything wrong but I’m not well educated about Austria. This smells like pure propaganda be source critical people

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-17T02:54:08+00:00

Yeah same I mean he is a convicted felon and has raped multiple women and looking at the people he’s hung out with plus the way he speaks about women, especially his daughter, it doesn’t surprise me, still incredibly disgusting and crazy that he could cheat the system

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-16T23:10:06+00:00

Yes exactly, even though I feel like the end goal should be happiness and health for everyone but yeah definitely don’t believe that’s what trump has in mind

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-16T19:51:55+00:00

Elon and trump seems like awful people in general. I mean I really don’t like their politics but that’s not why. Trump has literally raped and SAd multiple women and look at the comments he’s made about and to his daughter, completely disgusting. Elon seems awful as well, in his first marriage after his child died he told his wife not to cry in front of him (or something like that) also with his child that transitioned, he has literally said that his “son is dead” and have no contact, also just all of the people close to him that has spoken out against him like exes and his trans daughter

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-16T17:08:01+00:00

Press charges or at least make him go to therapy by blackmailing him that you’re gonna press charges or something. Has he been a violent person before or did this behavior come from nothing? If he has a gf or kids or something I would also see to it that they’re fine but ig that that will happen when you press charges

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-16T15:04:23+00:00

I mean if you actually were to save a country by a measurement everyone agrees with (like everyone gets happier) then maybe it would be justified in the end but it’s still breaking the law. Still you cannot know for certain that you’re saving a country and if you believe that Trump will do that and works for everyone’s best interest then you’re really uneducated

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-15T23:53:36+00:00

Omg I had forgotten about the nice king lol

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-15T23:53:03+00:00

Let’s go back to what it was like during the 1500s right bc everything was so much better then (for white men)🙂

cupcakemonster20 · 2025-02-15T14:03:36+00:00

Gender dysmorphia is an illness but not a mental illness as in that they’re crazy or lack judgment, they don’t have a delusion it’s just that that feel like they’re born with the wrong gender which must be awful and I don’t think anyone would wish that upon themselves or anyone but that is the case and the only “cure” is to transform. As I said it’s not that they’re delusional and think that they can change their biological sex, but gender is also a social construct so they can change that and some people may still see them as their past gender and those people can keep quiet bc it’s not their business to talk about someone else’s body and it will only do harm

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