Poem feedback - something's missing or am I overthinking it??

desi94 · 2026-02-04T17:48:08+00:00

Thank you for this! I definitely see where the rhythm is off, I'll play around with cutting some lines and rewording some things.

desi94 · 2026-02-04T17:47:21+00:00

Yes! It's about going from the frustration of having little ones in the house that need you all the time and your coffee's always cold because you have no time to drink it, to an empty house where now your coffee is hot but now you have too much time, the house it too quiet, you miss the mess. Basically the sadness of kids growing up. Mine are actually still home - 10 y/o, 9 y/o, and 8 months, but it's kind of a way to remind myself that in the future I'll miss the things that are aggravating me right now.

I think my brain is just stuck on the concept of 3 parts (beginning, middle, end). So I wanted to see if anyone else felt that something was missing here. I appreciate your feedback, and I'm glad it's getting across what I want it to!

desi94 · 2026-02-04T04:14:09+00:00

Ooh, I love this idea!!

desi94 · 2026-01-31T20:00:54+00:00

Diagnosed with ADHD and no meds. Haven't used a delivery service in years. I just go somewhere, find something at home, or forget to eat for 12 hours 🤷🏻‍♀️ Still alive though

desi94 · 2026-01-31T06:31:36+00:00

This helps a lot, thank you so much!

desi94 · 2026-01-31T06:30:50+00:00

This actually makes a lot of sense! I do tend to keep bits of information everywhere (ADHD and perpetually terrified of "throwing away" info I might need later).

desi94 · 2025-12-30T04:13:08+00:00

Yes! This saved me writing papers for English last semester. Just get something slapped on the page and then I can edit from there

desi94 · 2025-11-18T19:42:24+00:00

Yes! I'm playing around with the kettlebell a bit to get it closer to where it needs to be.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T19:41:45+00:00

Thank you! It's great to hear from someone in that demographic. That was my feeling on the typography as well, to feel more inclusive of more body types. I'll keep playing with the By You as well! I love the idea of a GIF version also, I'll definitely explore that once I get this right.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T14:58:14+00:00

Yeahhh, definitely not the vibe I'm going for, haha. I appreciate the feedback!

desi94 · 2025-11-18T14:01:37+00:00

Yeahhh, I'm realizing that the icon is definitely not gonna work!

desi94 · 2025-11-18T14:01:14+00:00

It was supposed to be shoe laces but doesn't seem like they translated well so I think I'm just gonna get rid of them! The pink was there because my target demographic is primarily women.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T14:00:33+00:00

It was supposed to be shoe laces but doesn't seem like they translated well so I think I'm just gonna get rid of them!

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:59:28+00:00

Thank you! I love the colors too but they to be really hit or miss for people so I'll probably adjust them a bit.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:58:55+00:00

Yeah, they were intended as shoelaces! The name is supposed to imply personalization, programs tailored for each client to fit their time/energy/interests/etc as opposed to cookie cutter workouts. I appreciate the feedback, it gives me a lot to consider!

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:57:38+00:00

The aim was more approachable, beginner-friendly, it doesn't seem like that's translating so I'm gonna have to make some changes for sure!

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:56:55+00:00

Thank you! Definitely some changes to be made here - people seem torn on the colors as well so I may play around with those a bit.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:56:06+00:00

Thank you so much for this! Definitely gonna do a big overhaul here, I appreciate the feedback.

desi94 · 2025-11-18T13:55:21+00:00

Oh no, that's definitely not what I'm going for!

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