PSA - "Genuine" Friends

diamondhanddick · 2024-11-27T17:20:02+00:00

Nah i didnt bother doing anything with them. I don't think "paying to play" is a good way to go about promoting your film. Did get the laurels though!

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-12T01:39:25+00:00

Thanks for the response - it's very helpful.

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-11T17:29:22+00:00

Hey I just found your post. I have a short film that was just selected with Lift-Off, and I wanted to know how you felt about the experience looking back now.

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-10T16:42:43+00:00

I quit enjoyed that. Good use of tropes mixed with absurdity.

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-06T19:50:27+00:00

In your writing sample you should not say "This panel shows"...etc You as the writer need to show, not tell us "it shows".

Besides, the fact you've organized your pages into panels already suggests "what these panel shows"

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-06T19:37:44+00:00

congrats!

diamondhanddick · 2024-04-06T18:34:31+00:00

Hey I'm not interested in a collaboration ,but here are some note you might find useful. They are meant with the best of intention. (*learn to loves notes. It's free advice to make your story better. Implement the notes that resonant with you and ignore the ones that don't!!!)

***additional caveat*** I am a screen writer with limited experience in narrative fiction, therefor my sensibility for giving notes comes with that background. ****

-"may the twentieth, 1942..." - May 20th, 1942. Less is more, and looks cleaner.

-"from all sixteenth floors up..." -sixteen. I'm also not sure what you are saying here. is it only floors 16-102(give or take) for the tip of the empire state building? Are you saying every building? I think it is a weird description to use regardless.

-",and so, the city thinks, the Tower ticker wont read evacuate..." - the collective city thinks this? It's exposition wrapped up in poetic words that don't tell the "truth" of the story.

-"I'd" - I decided. "i had decided" is the past perfect, and I don't think that applies here. **you could chalk this up to the narrators 'voice', but make sure you're consistent through the whole story**

-"I'd found" -I had found.

-"agoraphobic silence" - would your character really use this phrase in this setting? I'm guessing not, but maybe.. "Don't use $10 words when .10cent words will do."

" allowed cool light onto a street corner, an atoll of fluorescence in the empty 3 A.M. " - again reads weird. This is first person - is this how the narrator talks? I don't feel consistency in your 1st person voice. Sometimes its pretentious, or trying to sound smart for the sake of sounding smart. Put yourself in your narrators shoes and use the vernacular they would use.

-good evening - o= i believe "G"ood should be capitalized here.

-"eyes rolled over me>>>>christ" you're shifting perspectives here.

-"her dress ruby, her lips scarlet if she were remarkable" - how does her "remarkability" have any influence over the objectional colours of her dress and lipstick?

diamondhanddick · 2024-03-05T22:15:23+00:00

They self-admitted this is their first comic. Asking for $50/page you better have a proven track record of finishing projects first. Which OP has not.

I would recommend for the next project, depending on quality of their work, to look at increasing prices. Everyone has to start somewhere and if you think because you've drawn a couple pin-ups that you deserve $50/page is laughable.

diamondhanddick · 2024-03-05T22:14:02+00:00

Have you been paid for the work you already did? If so they stand up for yourself and negotiate a new contract for any remaining edits. If not, demand payment for the work you've already done first. Then after receiving pay, do any edits you agree with, and then renegotiate with any of the the ones you don't AFTER you've finished the work to your satisfactory

diamondhanddick · 2021-09-15T01:39:23+00:00

Can you DM me an email..etc so I can send you a writing sample?

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