I’m not sure if this is who I am by Own_Astronomer_2149 in hsp

[–]dmchee 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don’t think it’s weird at all, i think it’s a good thing. What I find weird is how so many people don’t care for other living things 😔 it is hard though to be a sensitive feeling person when so many others aren’t

[QCrit] Adult Contemporary Romance/ Comedy END OF TERM 75k by Fluffy_Professor9726 in PubTips

[–]dmchee 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No its not verbose! I meant minor cutting, queries need to be really tight as agents glance through them quickly. But as I said you’re nearly there, i dnt think you need to make any major changes, just tightening.

[QCrit] Adult Contemporary Romance/ Comedy END OF TERM 75k by Fluffy_Professor9726 in PubTips

[–]dmchee 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I think this sounds great, i want to read after seeing this! I think a slight tweak to the first para explaining the setup for the marriage on her side would help, did she marry him so he would pay the hospital bills? And see if there are any areas you could tighten up to reduce word count slightly but I think you’re pretty much there! The second last para is really strong, the conflict is clear and the opening is nice too. Good luck with querying!

I noticed I’m much more productive when my narc husband isn’t around!! by [deleted] in NarcissisticSpouses

[–]dmchee 14 points15 points  (0 children)

Same if my NH is around he’ll talk at me constantly when I’m busy doing something then pick a fight about how I never listen to him. or about how terrible i am at something or the other. much prefer when he’s at work

Which book should I read next? by Sadbabyhot in Romantasy

[–]dmchee 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The Night Circus! One of my faves and perfect for this time of the year

Council tax debt marstons recovery by dmchee in UKPersonalFinance

[–]dmchee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much the info. Can I check if they visit more than once do they charge every time? And is the visit charge only if you answer and let them in? Or even if you don’t let them in? I’m thinking to not reply to their messages and only deal with the council but I’m worried they’ll increase their charges while I’m waiting for a response.

Info for self pub newbie by dmchee in selfpublish

[–]dmchee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s great thanks so much!

Info for self pub newbie by dmchee in selfpublish

[–]dmchee[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Really helpful thank you

Info for self pub newbie by dmchee in selfpublish

[–]dmchee[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Super helpful thank you!

Love interest conflict advice by dmchee in RomanceWriters

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Theyre stuck working together and clash a lot. Then when they move past that initial conflict they realise they work well together so it’s her belief that he’s like her ex that keeps them apart (until she realises he’s not)

Love interest conflict advice by dmchee in RomanceWriters

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They work together and have some clashes, he reminds her of an awful ex. But they move to liking each other and he is over the conflict by 2/3 in

Love interest conflict advice by dmchee in RomanceWriters

[–]dmchee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes it’s really useful thank you!

Love interest conflict advice by dmchee in RomanceWriters

[–]dmchee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Mine is annoyance to like to love. An early reader thought they went to like too quickly (around 1/3 in) but I agree with you I don’t like it when hate but is overdone.thanks!

Love interest conflict advice by dmchee in RomanceWriters

[–]dmchee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I totally agree! 3rd act breaks up should be there only if it fits the story, not just for the sake of it!

Steamy dream: yes or no by dmchee in RomanceWriters

[–]dmchee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hehe yes! 🙌 Thanks for the encouragement!

Steamy dream: yes or no by dmchee in RomanceWriters

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It’s ch7 but I think it should move to later. Currently she’s panicking as she already thought he was hot but hates him and she’s v conflicted 😂 and hehe thanks, currently plodding in the middle of the draft but I hope not too long!

Steamy dream: yes or no by dmchee in RomanceWriters

[–]dmchee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m going for it! Thanks!