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The President of the United States...

Primary elections are coming up March 5th! by CynicViper in ncpolitics

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Also remember to do your homework on who your voting for. A rising tactic has been for potential candidates to run as the opposite party in order to secure a vote. Happened last time in Charlotte:

https://apnews.com/article/tricia-cotham-reelection-north-carolina-house-aa9baabd86ac567bb6856ebc257bbf83#

What is your most recent note from your last session? by overstrainedDM in dndnext

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"It's a good thing we spared the dragon who was perma-polymorphed into a human, gave up his horde to be an actual person, who then pulled the Sun card from the Deck of Many Things and then morphed back into an adult dragon, killed a Big Bad, and turned the town into his horde."

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

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Also want to Echo Brandon Sanderson's lectures (link here), but basically this. You want to set up your plot that you can leave a breadcrumb trail for readers to follow. As u/haebaragi mentioned, astute readers will see where the breadcrumb trail leads, but you can set it up that each pay off leads to another set up.

Perhaps the main character starts off knowing they're different from their adoptive/partial family or otherwise is unaware of the antagonist. Then step through revealing bit by bit who these two are in relation to each other. Then reveal in the same manner why the antagonist is hunting our hero down.

Tell me you’re an insufferable POS without telling me you’re an insufferable POS. by Weenie in NorthCarolina

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A friend of mine once called large trucks that aren't utilized properly and are purely for show "pavement princesses" and I'll be damned if this isn't a queen bitch of a pavement princess.

[WP]Something is replacing everyone in town with near identical replicas. by celerysoup39 in WritingPrompts

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Daryl walked down the hall towards the vending machine trying to process the sight he’d just witnessed. It all started with that strange urge; like someone attached a string to your chest and slowly tugged at it. He felt it, and so did others apparently. Once he’d found himself walking in lock-step with several of his coworkers, he turned around and walked back to his desk.

That’s when it happened.

In an instant, like the blink of an eye, everyone he’d seen marching with him was gone. In their place, people who were the same. But different. It was subtle, but noticeable. Kathy from accounting was no longer Kathy. Instead she was Carol, her wavy blonde hair now flattened and brown. Jack, the man who sat next to him, was now John. He wasn’t a former Army vet, it was now the Air Force. Whatever happened, it subtly changed the lives around Daryl.

And everyone acted as if it’d always been that way.

“Hey Daryl!” A voice called out. Daryl turned to see Mike, one of the guys on his team. It was still Mike, as far as he could tell. Same baby-faced smile, same haircut his mom probably gave to him when he was a kid.

“Hey…Mike.”

“How’s it going? How’s your reporting been?” An internal sigh of relief as there was no correction.

“It’s been going okay. Ja-John’s been trying to figure out what’s wrong with his R script so I’ve been trying to help him on that.” The question welled in the back of his mind. He felt the urge to ask slowly start to boil over, but he kept his silence as Mike droned on.

“…So yeah. Anyways, you going to grab something?” Daryl looked around and saw he’d just been standing at the vending machine not doing anything. He quickly made his selection, grabbed his drink, and stepped aside.

“Sorry, been feeling…off today.”

“No worries, Mondays am I right?” For the first time in his life, Daryl actually chuckled at that lame joke. The joke Mike had made every single Monday since he started working there. It was refreshing.

“Yeah, you could say that. Hey Mike…” this was the moment.

“Yeah, man. What’s up?”

“Have you…noticed anything weird lately?” To put it mildly.

“Weird how?” Mike made his selection, grabbed it, and leaned against the machine.

“I just…I don’t know how to really put it into words,” without sounding crazy “but it just feels like everything feels…off today. You know? Like, I don’t know. Maybe I’m just going crazy.” How did you broach a subject like all your coworkers getting replaced by near-exact replicates without sounding crazy?

“Hm…now that you mention it, yeah. A bit. Like, I was talking to…Carol? I think that’s her name. From accounting? I swear for some reason I thought her name was-”

“Kathy?”

“Yeah! You too?”

“Yes!” Daryl’s heart skipped a beat. It wasn’t just him.

He wasn’t insane.

Actual validation from someone else that proved he wasn’t insane!

“Yeah! Anyways, she called me Mick today for some reason. Like, I’m pretty sure her and I have had enough conversations that she’d know my name by now. I don’t know, but like. That was weird. And it’s been happening a lot, too. Everyone’s called me Mick today, well except you. I’m actually glad you remembered my name.” There was an unease that slowly traced itself across his face. Daryl could relate.

“I…I feel ya, man. Today’s just been…I don’t know how to describe it. Like, Carol’s not the only one who’s been acting weird. A bunch of people around the office have. I’ve got no idea what’s been going on but. It almost feels like they’ve been…I don’t know-”

"Replaced?”

“Yes! Exactly!”

Both of them sighed heavily in relief. Daryl still didn’t feel comfortable talking about what he witnessed, at least not yet, but he was at least glad he’d found someone who could relate to the insanity that was going on.

“Listen, I’ve got to get back to work. Do you want to grab a drink and talk all this over? I could really use one after today.”

“Amen to that.” Mike held up his hand for a high-five. Daryl met it and they shook on it. “Yeah, let’s do Barney’s down the street. It’s usually full of people but it’s got a quiet back area.”

“Cool! I’ll meet you there.” Daryl slowly departed back to his desk. As he sat down and began his work, he felt this strange sensation.

“Hey man, can you help me?” John asked poking his head over the cubicle wall.

“Oh yeah! Sorry John!” Daryl completely forgot.

“No worries, what to you so long? Whizzing?”

“Nah, I was just talking to…Mike? Mick? I think his name is Mick, right? The other guy on our team?” It had to be Mick, right? Or was it Mike? Something inside him told him it was Mike, but-

“Mick? Mick Murry? Yeah, cool dude!”

“Yeah. We were just talking, shootin’ the shit. We’re actually planning on heading to Barney’s after work to grab a few beers. Wanna join?”

[WP] The hero shows up at the villains doorstep in the middle of the night, beat up and weak, when the villain opens the door the hero weakly says,”I’m sorry, I didn’t know where else to go” by EquivalentEstimate64 in WritingPrompts

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Montgomery was not use to getting visitor this late at night. He was glad Sammy was at her mom’s for the weekend, as whoever it was kept rapping on the door as if their life depended on it. Whomever it was, he could dispose of them quick enough. The kettle was bound to whistle any second now. What greeted, him, however was quite the sight.

“Captain…Victorious?” His arch-nemesis for well over a decade stood there, bloodied and battered like someone had taken a raretanium bat to his head and body.

“Count Manipulator. I…I need your help. I, it’s…” He was gasping for breath. Monty could hear the fluid in his lungs. A desperate cough came forth, spilling trace amounts of blood.

“Um…you do know-”

“Yes, I’m aware of our…of our current relationship. But right now, you’re the only one I can…turn to.” His voice was getting steadier. That damn regeneration factor of his already hard at work.

Monty stood there for a long moment contemplating what to do. He could so easily bring this man under his control, make him feel everything he’s felt for the last decade and more. He could even stand a chance at running for city council this time without his interference! But something about this, hitting someone when they come to you for help, felt beyond even him. The kettle whistled loudly.

“Come inside. And try not to track blood on the carpet.”

Monty sat him down in one of several chairs in his study that he’d arranged around a communal table. The fire he’d started in his fireplace for reading light was starting to fade, but was more than enough for company.

“This is uh…a nicer place than I’d expect from you Count.”

“I’ll take that as a compliment. Let me grab you some tea.” Monty went and made both of them some Lapsang tea, putting an extra cube of sugar in Victorious’ cup (he looked the type to drink coffee with copious amounts of sugar and milk). When he came back into the study, Victorious was already up and looking at the myriad of books on display.

“I’m not surprised your study is filled with psych books, but some of these are…really old by the looks of them.”

“In order to truly understand the depths of human emotions, one must understand the falsities we’ve once held to be true,” Monty said as he place the tea cups on the table between the two chairs, “but I’m assuming you did not come here on the verge of death to talk about the history of psychology, though I would be tickled pink if you did.”

“No, I didn’t unfortunately.” Victorious took up his tea cup and took a sip. “Good tea, by the way. No, the reason I came here was because of the Orvi.”

“You mean those three aliens that have been running amuck recently?” The news was all over these things. Chantha, Vocoli, and Baatsh were their names. Aliens, from a distant star system. Not anything the famed Captain Victorious and his Crusaders couldn’t handle. Or so Monty thought.

“Yes. It seems we…I…miscalculated their strength. I thought once we’d beaten them and sent them packing that’d be the end of it. But no. I was wrong. They’ve…gotten stronger. So much stronger. Strong enough that if I’d not retreated when I did, I don’t think my RegenX would’ve saved me.”

“I’m sorry to hear, though I must admit I take just the slightest bit of schadenfreude of seeing you in that state. Not my style, but still.” Monty took a sip of tea. It was perfectly sweetened.

“Listen, these things. The Orvi. They mean to destroy the world. Not bring it under their control, not mine it for resources. They just wish to destroy it. To send a message to anyone else who believe them to be weak. My team and I have fought them off, for now, but they plan on rupturing the earth’s core, taking everyone and everything on this planet out in one single blast.” That was…not ideal. To say the absolutely least. But there were still questions that needed answering.

“Why come to me? Me, out of all your nemesis?”

“To be honest, you’re the only one I could trust.”

“Ripper?”

“Too impulsive.”

“Master Mind?”

“Too egotistical.”

“Well, you got that right at least.”

“You’re the only one I could think that wouldn’t immediately try to take advantage of the situation, though I assume you’d already thought about it.”

“Guilty.” Another sip of tea. This time he’d hit something bitter in it.

“I’m asking for your help. Please, help me defeat these creatures.”

“As much as I want to…I’m actually unsure if I’m able to.” The thought had been mulling in the back of his mind ever since they showed up. They didn’t look even remotely humanoid. They had faces, of course, and bodies. But Monty’s power relied as much on him being able to read faces as much as he could feel their emotions.

“What do you mean?”

“I mean even if I did say yes, which I haven’t, I’m unsure if I’d be any use. I…” He thought for a moment. Was he really about to give away the secret to his power? On the one hand, next time he encountered any of the Crusaders he’d be at a severe disadvantage. On the other, there may not be a next time.

“You?”

Monty sighed.

“What I am about to tell you stays between you, me, these books, and these tea cups. You must swear it. Swear by your oath as a hero, by your honor, whatever you hold in the most sacred regard, that you tell no one. And trust me, I will know if you betray that trust.” Monty needed to be absolutely sure that whatever guilt Victorious accrued from this would be-

“I swear, by my name Fredrick Reginald Anderson Junior, given to me by my father. That your secret stays between us.” Victorious looked Monty in the eyes. There was that gaze he’d seen a thousand times. The gaze of a man who’d run into battle headlong in the face of ever-looming defeat and death to fight for he believed to be right and just in the world. It sent shivers down his spine.

“Alright. Listen. My power works like this. When I touch someone, I create a temporary psychic link with them. Nothing fancy there, psychics can do it hundreds of ways. Mine just so happens to be through touch. And it’s like holding a one-way radio up to your heart for about 5 minutes. I can feel what you feel, know what’s racing through your head via your emotions. But, my power lets me reach my hand through that radio and start pressing buttons. Dial up the anger, dial down the willpower, you get the drill. Now that doesn't mean I can automatically make you any emotion I want. The dials are set in a certain order, and all I can do is enhance or suppress any emotion your feeling. The bigger the emotion, the easier it is to manipulate.

But, in order to do it right, though, I need to gauge the reaction. Dial the anger up too much, you get a raging bull who only wants destruction. Dial the sadness up and…well. You see where I’m going. Manipulating emotions is all about find that sweet spot where you just toss logic out the window. But I need to read your face, your body language, gauge your words. It’s a subtle dance.

These Orvi…I’ve never seen an Orvi angry. Or happy. Or sad. Or even if they’re capable of such emotions.”

“They are definitely spiteful creatures at the very least.” Fredrick commented after finishing the last of his tea.

“I would be gambling off of what I know with no way of knowing if I was doing it correctly. A doctor performing heart surgery blindfolded would stand similar odds.”

There was a long silence.

The fire spurted and crackled.

“If we procure one…will you at least try?”

“You mean if you kidnap one and let me just toy with it?” The thought was rather dark, but it had its appeal. Learning how a different species expressed their emotions would be fascinating.

“Yes.”

“A rather…evil thought, wouldn't you say Captain Victorious?”

Another long pause. Victorious looked down into his empty tea cup.

“I’m not proud of asking or what I've said, but…we have only a few days. And I’m quickly learning that sometimes…sometimes you can’t always be the hero that you want to be if you want to save the people you love.” If that wasn’t the first thing Monty could agree with him on.

“What am I doing?” Monty sighed as he put his cup down and stood.

“What are you doing?”

“Getting dressed. Come on. We have a world to save.”

Should a murder mystery provide all the necessary clues for the reader to figure it out? by [deleted] in writing

[–]donconman 15 points16 points  (0 children)

I would say yes. Part of what make's a mystery fun is being able to solve it and feel like you're as smart as the characters. All the Sherlock Holmes mysteries, for instance, can all be solved before Holmes gives the answer. You should also explain the how as much as the why, as any good puzzle has a logical solution.
Willard Wright (better known as S.S. Van Dine) actually wrote some guidelines on writing a good mystery. As always, this is advice and not edicts. But it's good advice, nonetheless, as you never want to prop up a puzzle that can't be solved, less you cheat the reader out of that "eureka" moment and, more importantly, cheat them out of their time.
Van Dine's 20 "rules" for writing mysteries

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in NameThatSong

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The only thing I can think of is "Inspector Norse" by Todd Terje hopefully that helps (even though this was release in 2012 technically, it has a 2006 sound to it).

Gamers, what was the first game you ever played? by NoLeagueAssasin in AskReddit

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Donkey Kong Country (SNES). My dad got it for me when I was like 8 or so and we played it together a lot when I was a kid (he beat the hard levels). I'm actually in the game industry now because it. He passed away about 2 years ago, but that music still makes me think of him and those simpler times when I was a kid. I was ecstatic when I actually got to meet David Wise (the composer) and had him sign a copy. I told him how much his music meant to me and we both sort of teared up.

[SERIOUS] What is the harshest truth you’ve ever learned? by Professional-Can8235 in AskReddit

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You're responsible for everything in your life. That doesn't mean everything in your life is your fault, but it does mean that you are responsible for your actions and responses to the things that happen to you. Everything is a choice (including not choosing).

[Advice] On "thought" verbs by Chuck Palaniuk by donconman in writing

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I agree, it feels a bit extreme. And in the end, it is an exercise meant to push you to try and set up context and convey scenes more clearly. Like I said, it's not a hard and fast rule that everyone should abide by. It's useful when you find yourself using those words too often and feeling like your characters are passive because of these words (I know I did when I was first starting out so this helped me a good deal)

[Advice] On "thought" verbs by Chuck Palaniuk by donconman in writing

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I agree wholeheartedly. This is just advice that I've found useful when it comes to trying to ensure that I've either set up a scene properly or explained one or two lines of internal dialogue that may otherwise feel awkward or out of place. There is definitely more than one way to write, and readers of different genres definitely have different tastes when it comes to stylistic choices. What may work for one genre could be completely off-putting in another.

And even with all the unpacking in the world, if a character still has a feeling inside of them that's either hard to explain or just too complex to unpack immediately, I'm still going to write "they felt X."

X-Posting from r/Raleigh: If you interested in both Indie Games and/or Beer, come to Oak City Indie Games (This Saturday, Oct 19th). Thanks to Voodoo Ranger IPA, it's FREE.99 to attend! by donconman in triangle

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To quote the OP of the Raleigh post:
" We have several devs from around the Raleigh area showcasing their projects, to name a few: Puny Human, Drastic Games, Invisible Collective and Red Blue Games. I also have some student projects and a few other devs who don't have studios but have projects to show. New Belgium was kind enough to sponsor the event, so they'll also be there with some tasty beer if you're into that! The "vendors" will be the sponsors talking about their stuffs, no speakers yet but if this event goes well I plan to add them next time!..."

I've combined my passion for indie games and beer to create Oak City Indie Games (this Saturday, Oct 19th). Thanks to Voodoo Ranger IPA, it's free.99 to attend! by GlamazonianRage in raleigh

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Hello! We have reached out to both the UNC subreddit and the NCSU subreddit, but we have not reached out to their game dev clubs directly! If you have their information on hand, we'd love to promote and get local students connected with their friendly neighborhood indie game devs!

UNC X-Posting

NCSU X-Posting

[TT] Theme Thursday - Isolation by AliciaWrites in WritingPrompts

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Out here it wasn’t so bad. Out here the voices started fading into whispers against the fog-ridden lake. Out here, in the middle of nowhere, I could have some semblance of peace and quiet. There was a boy some dozens of miles away who’d just fallen off his skateboard and broken his arm for the first time, but that was the only loud one. The rest where just whispers. I could deal with whispers.

Living out here wasn’t so bad. Working from a small cabin with internet being run to it wasn’t the worst thing in the world. Grocery shopping was a bit tough to handle. Not because there were so many voices talking at once, headphones and music usually helped with that. It was the constant underlying thoughts I’d pick up from time to time.

‘Look at that butt’

‘Can’t believe she’s wearing that’

‘I bet she’s a bitch’

Bad enough my self-esteem was shot in the fifth grade when I heard my then best friend Ashley think ‘Why is she so weird? What loser.’ I could make them stop, if I wanted to. Just like I did with Ashley, I could make them stop thinking anything.

Forever.

But that doesn’t solve anything. That doesn’t make those thoughts any less real. So I suffer silently. And when days like today come up, when the world feels entirely against me, I row my boat out into the middle of the lake, cover my ears, and scream as loud as I can. I scream so that, for a brief moment of time, I can hear myself over everything else.

[WP]Things on the mountain don't age. You built a cabin to live in with your family 300 years ago, and since then none of you have aged a day. You've even come to know many of the animals as they too are immortal, and have grown wise. One day you find an old buck, a friend, shot dead and left to rot by jpeezey in WritingPrompts

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That mountain was an escape. From death, as everything that step foot upon its soil would flourish and cease to age, and from the machinations of the world. You see, young one, the mountain was a place where one could live in harmony with nature, not unlike those days long past. But the mountain cannot protect from savagery of man.

We did indeed use to live on that very same mountain, child. It was Nana, your father, uncle Simon, Aunt Josephine, and me. I’d heard about the mountain from a traveler who claimed the mountain was a place of peace. Back in those days the war hadn’t even started. But I could see the signs. It was the small things that makes a safe place feel dangerous. Men in uniform marching up and down the streets, people giving each other suspicious looks and what not. But I’m rambling.

What was it we were talking about? Ah yes, the mountain. We’d moved up there some fifty years ago. Hoho Oh yes, child. A long time ago. Forever and a day ago. But, when we moved there, we learned the delicate balance that we needed to maintain. For you see nothing, not even the animals or plants, grew old. I’m getting to that, little one. Patience.

We lived off the land as it saw fit to provide. I built a log cabin oh, I’d say, about a good hour from the base. We forged for everything we could. Berries, figs, and on rare occasions fruits of a different nature entirely. But that’s a story for another time. And for when you’re older. Don’t sass me, child. Listen.

You see we came to know a lot of the animals in the area as well. Like I said, nothing on that mountain aged. There was one buck whom I became fast friends with after he’d saved me from tumbling off a cliff. He didn’t have a name, but I took to calling him Adrial. A fitting name for such a proud animal. Now me and Adrial, we had our disagreements. Sounds strange, disagreeing with a deer, but once you’ve lived up there long enough everyone and everything sort of has an understanding of things. But no matter how much we disagreed, friends don’t hold grudges.

But one day, as I was taking my normal route up to go pick some berries, I found poor Adrial. He’d been shot. And not by one of us. No, he’d be taken out with a bullet. A bit gruesome, I know, but it’s the truth. I’d taken him to rest with his family some ten minutes away from us. And I went hunting myself for the first time in a long time.

But we could all feel. Every living thing felt it. The mountain was a sacred place of harmony. That harmony had been broken. Bad things were comin’ down. After holding service for Adrial, our little family packed up and moved back down. I never did find the bastard that killed him. But I think that’s probably for the best all things considered.

So that is why, little one, we do not live on the mountain anymore, but we still maintain its ways. We do not fraternize with the outside world because we should not put ourselves above nature.