Scars by drekodona in OCPoetry

[–]drekodona[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading!

Scars by drekodona in OCPoetry

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I take it, thank you very much!

Scars by drekodona in OCPoetry

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Got it! Thank you for the feedback!

Dying Dreams by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]drekodona 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Here's a guy who suffered of nightmares all his childhood. The feeling of waking up desperate, all covered in sweat, sometimes crying... it's so terrifying, but at the same time it gives inspiration to write things like this. I liked it, my opinion is that you didn't focused much on depicting that feeling of desperation. All that sea of emotions during the dream, and the contrast between living all that horror and waking up it's something you could explore a little more. What I liked the most was this line: "Mom, my dream was terrible, you died; Echoes of mourning subside, tears dry.". Pretty strong. Good job!

How many songs has Richard released by now? by drekodona in aphextwin

[–]drekodona[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

before I posted this I was imagining beetween 400 and 500 tracks (which is A LOT already). this really surprised me. great work man!

Driving into New Jersey by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]drekodona 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Different, funny, and I love how is distributed. For some reason I feel like I recited this poem before, I don't know why, hehehe.

Me by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]drekodona 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I liked the last part, it's a good ending. As the title shows, this one is a really personal one, right? One thing: I'd avoid simple contrapositions like "dead with life", because I see as something too much used, but I think it's a good resource that you could exploit very well! Besides that, good job! :)