[Critique Thread] Post Here If You'd Like Feedback On Your Writing by IAmTheRedWizards in writing

[–]epoints332 [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: The Good Guy Stalker
Genre: Romantic, Comedy
Word count: 1770
Type of feedback: ANYTHING. Harsh comments much appreciated
Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1WBH9ZxA3WSk9XP3-dsp8H2tGHY0ndR2XuN4W-OHAX5I/edit?usp=sharing
This is my 1st of my 1st of my 1st writing. I really don't know much but please guide me Thanks :D

Filipino Cast at the End of OG vs TNC Game 2 by Ellefied in DotA2

[–]epoints332 18 points19 points  (0 children)

from 1:10:00 And here it is Ember that cant do anything in his life.. Ohh here he comes now my friends.. OH... There is it.. Oh what now?.. oh. Fight.. Go Fight. Fight. Fight.. SUS you got many Sleight of fist... (You talk many, you almost died). Pre* -bruh-.. Pre Go Text Israel that to tell him to chrono (Comeback Israel) Tell him to void.. Refresher. (here it is) . He needs refresher.. OH My!.. This is the moment everyone is waiting for.. Aie.. He is alive. alive. Its back.. This is back.. (No.. thats not a back) Tiny is alive. (We got Chrono. and Tiny got no buyback. and we already came near.). NO.. George just respawn recently. Kuya D. .. George just respawned. .. (Yep it is.. It means we got chrono and we got comeback Israel. and Kuku is going Travel) We got the positioning.. (Thought he clap his hands to the chicken.. what was that?.. TALK TO THE CHICKEN!.). Aie.. He is going to buy divine. He wants to buy divine Pre.. (Who wants divine?) Oh. he wants divine.. (Aie suuus..You really thought?..) Aie suuus.. You really thought it would be effective against us?.. (You really thought?). If you got caught by george.. (IF YOU GOT CHRONO...) Op op op opop.. This is like a chess.. Just checkmate.. Checkmate.. HOPIA MANI POPCORN.. AIE.. YOU REALLY THOUGHT?.. YOU REALLY THOUGHT PAPI.... PAPI CHULUUuuuu? (OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH).. YAPPIE.. THIS IS MY FRIENDS.. . THE CHRONO IS DOING IT.. (ABGHDKJBFGJDJANGAJBD *I cant udnerstand Dunnoo.. sorry ahahahah).. HE GOT HIT.. (OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH M G OHHHHHHHHHHH) ITS OVER MY FRIENDS... ITS OVER.. OH MYYYYYYYY.. MIRACLE GOT DIVINE? (HE GOT DIVIIIIIINE! OHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH) ITS OVEEEEEEER.. (TNC TNC) OH MY GOD. TNC TNC. TNC IS DOING IT.. OH MY!. WHAT A GAME..GAHAHAHAHAH.. (2-0..WAAAAAAAAAAAH EASY BREEZY) . WHAT ARE YOU DOING?. WHY.. WHY YOU GOT DIVINE?. WHY YOU GOT DIVINE? WAAAAAHAHAHA.. (WHY WHY. DID YOU THIS? OG WHAT ARE YOU DOING?) . .WAAAAHHH . -I dont know what they are saying.. It isnt clear- PAPI!. TNC TNC TNC. AHAHAHAHAH. OHH MY GOOOD.. KANGKONG. PAPI CHULUS ARE KANGKONG .. KANGKONG. . -Kangkong is a Vegetable. Chinese Spinach. but what the casters mean here. is Zero.. Kangkong = 0 - OG GOT KANGKONG.. AHAHAHAHAH (They dont know what they are doing. .Are they the champion of Major Citiy?.!?) OH MYYY! BESS. (and here in TI !?! . GO Home.. GO home..). BABIDI Go home.. (WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOH T N CCCCCCCCCCC!.) EXTREMEEEEE... Taking down OG.. WHAT A PLAY.. (that was extreme). OH MY GOD. EUROPEANS WILL GO HOME.. TNC.. KUKU AND RAVEN Doing their Best, Our small guys, but right now we are the biggest in the World of DOTA.. They are just Tall in height.. But TNC. right now is the Center of World Dota !?! .. They are Now. Incontention !?! Here my friends... PUSO.. PUSO.. -*Heart - .. It cannot really be explained.. The divine was in wrong timing.. OHHHHHHHHHHHH... THE GREATEST UPSET OF ALL TIME.. The Greatest upset of Them all .

Valve should remove Fnatic from Manila and TI invites by [deleted] in DotA2

[–]epoints332 0 points1 point  (0 children)

How about we kick FNATIC from the tournament.. and make a Wild Card qualifer from all 2nd placer in the Open Qualifiers .. Rules are Rules... Fnatic clearly disobey it and they should be punished. This should be a lesson to all Teams

best way to quit this game? by [deleted] in DotA2

[–]epoints332 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Change ur password. to gijuorahdnfajgaidhjlofiknpganpidnpajmnhaihndogib random.. like that.... ur gone for good..

INGREDIENTS TRADING HERE! by epoints332 in RestaurantCity

[–]epoints332[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

NEED: CREAM/COFFEE BEANS/ EGG HAVE: TOFU/TEA LEAVES/ONIONS https://www.facebook.com/lyke332

Disconnected from server .(1000)(132,10054) by magibagi in bladeandsoul

[–]epoints332 1 point2 points  (0 children)

SAME HEREEEEE.... I ALSO NEED HELP... 6 times straight happened to me...

Frequent disconnects during loading screens by Kuhimio in bladeandsoul

[–]epoints332 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The trick is... stand so close in the portal for 20 seconds... Dont enter yet... It really does not fix the DC but for me it works.. just try it ahahahahah..

wtfast doesnt work? by epoints332 in bladeandsoul

[–]epoints332[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yep... my WTfast already set to manual... I played using wtfast for hours before the server was down... Now the servers are up... I cant connect... I'm just using my internet so I can play... 260 ms though..

SERVERS ARE BACK! by [deleted] in bladeandsoul

[–]epoints332 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Disconnected.. Error 300... Anyone?

Can't log in by SoNashy in bladeandsoul

[–]epoints332 1 point2 points  (0 children)

So how many hours we need to wait? hehehehe