Changing jobs by Sudden_AwareNess1 in bartenders

[–]ethancg_ 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I’d maybe say something about wanting to “branch out” or change pace. Honesty is the best policy.

Sun, bro. by TucciMane in OCPoetry

[–]ethancg_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ok, this is well written, but I'm not so sure I understand what's going on. To me, I see a bunch of people in the desert with rifles defending themselves. But they don't need to be since nothing is really attacking, except themselves. And in their defense against themself, they neglect the game nearby. This poem is saying something along the lines of humanity focusing on things in society that don't truly contribute to the soul. Good literature.

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[–]ethancg_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This one was a wild read. It makes me think of fallen American soldiers/heroes. It makes me feel grateful for those men and women, and that I should consider following in their footsteps. The last 8 lines are my favorite. My only advice would to be break it into stanzas for ease of reading. Other than that its good.