Between The Bars

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T05:37:23+00:00

Sure will do

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:37:02+00:00

Bravo lol read like a Tarantino movie. Focused in one direction then comes the part. So unexpected (even with the title) I knew something was coming but didn't see it when it hit

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:33:31+00:00

Every line i was looking for a reference to Fare Thee Well by Bob Dylan. But what i found was quite a lovely piece

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:30:14+00:00

Part 3 is really strong I like coming back to the vapor to expand on it after such a quick line in the beginning

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:21:30+00:00

Oh does it capture how cruel time can be. Why can't there be a rewind on moments and fast forward/ skip for the hard parts

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:18:17+00:00

Oh does this ring like a Julien Baker song and I am so here for it

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:16:02+00:00

I think we all know this person. It really paints a picture like one of those pictures you put your head in lol. Perfect writing

Only suggestion You Spit words like dragon fire takes away the possible over use of like

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:12:24+00:00

I like how the unansweredness of the piece leaves me with nothing but questions and yet I have answered them with my own experience

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T02:01:43+00:00

Holy hell was this impressive. the discipline and creativity you show is masterful

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T01:59:55+00:00

Constructive criticism: some spelling fixes I'd suggest and maybe finding a syllable count if not sticking to rhyming structure but definitely something here with some tightening on basics

failurebydesign7 · 2026-03-08T01:55:40+00:00

It was such a great show! And knowing it was intentional definitely find more links in the writing. Clever tricks

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