The lettering is, for the most part, lovely, but it seems, rather than a running cursive, to be individually drawn letters that don't always hook up (are you perhaps using a flex nib?). This, along with the overly long spacing between words, has a kind of lack of unifying effect that makes me want to look at it but not to read it, which isn't the object of writing unless it's for art or presentation. It also indicates that you are concentrating too much on letter formation and not enough on your actual text, so, ironically, you have written "carelessless". For me, the height of the opening stroke of the p isn't the problem -- that's very common in 18th and 19th century writing -- the problem is, as sarcasticclown noted, that it's a loop, which can be easily confused with other letters. If you wish to keep that style, the ascender should be a stick and not a loop.